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Oooooh...please!!!
Contributed by
venkat
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Tuesday, 12th August 2003 @ 04:05:00 AM in AEST
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Yeah, the creator fashioned
Your eyes with blue lotus
Your face with white lotus
Your teeth with white jasmine
Your lips with tender shoots and
Your body with golden blossoms
But, my lady, why did he create
your heart with stone?
When we live in separation
The moon scorches like sun
The gentle breeze touches like flame
The flowers prick us like needles
O lotus eyed lady, you against me
Please don’t cherish ill will
I grieve to observe the series of obstacles
To our union there fore I could not meet you
The only course left to you is to give back
The embrace which I gave you in your dream
And return my kisses which too were given
O proud lady, give up your pride
Will my words fall on deaf ears
Why is this anger to me, your slave?
The swift entwining of arms
The sweet kisses on your lips and
The light stroking of your lovely breasts
If all this is an offence, do you then
Strike me with arrows of your side long glances
as long as we enjoy the bliss of this moon dance.
* * *
(source: Kalidasa)
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Re: Oooooh...please!!!
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 12th August 2003 @ 05:14:12 AM AEST
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| Oooh..this is great |
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Re: Oooooh...please!!!
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 12th August 2003 @ 05:42:02 AM AEST
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| Ooooh ... this is a surprising poem from you venkat ... very different, passionate and thought provoking ... "great" does not come close ... sincerely Jan |
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by DreamWeaver on
Tuesday, 12th August 2003 @ 05:46:51 AM AEST
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| Aww sorry venkat, that's my comment above, I forgot to sign in :)))) ... Jan |
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Re: Oooooh...please!!!
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by Ilhar on
Tuesday, 12th August 2003 @ 07:16:25 AM AEST
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lovely, passionate a very beautiful write
Shari |
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Re: Oooooh...please!!!
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by Saira on
Tuesday, 12th August 2003 @ 07:17:55 AM AEST
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A very passionate and lovely write. Good.
Saira |
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Re: Oooooh...please!!!
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by jaeann on
Tuesday, 12th August 2003 @ 07:27:54 AM AEST
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| wow.....o proud lady, give up your pride.....this was a beautiful thing to share........thank you |
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Re: Oooooh...please!!!
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 12th August 2003 @ 01:03:26 PM AEST
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Passion enflamed writing from a heart
of joyous bliss. Pleasant to behold.
Angel always......godspeed.....joni |
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Re: Oooooh...please!!!
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 12th August 2003 @ 04:19:59 PM AEST
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| mmm i hope your dreaming sweetie wakes up and returns your kisses and passion.......ahhh the poetry then *grin* hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Oooooh...please!!!
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 13th August 2003 @ 05:19:33 AM AEST
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| dear Nessa..I have written this poem just for my fun and it doesn't reflect my peaceful family life.o.k thank you..venkat |
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Re: Oooooh...please!!!
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by krystal on
Wednesday, 13th August 2003 @ 07:44:30 AM AEST
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ooooh venkat this is so beautiful...erotic and sexy, heartfelt and warm, sorrowful yet blissful...so deep are your feelings hidden within this poem. Very touching and greatly enjoyed. Thank you
Krystal:) |
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Re: Oooooh...please!!!
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by Wrybod on
Thursday, 14th August 2003 @ 02:56:20 AM AEST
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Hello Ven' my old pal (yes Im back in circulation having been "lost" in the material world of faulty plumbing, broken clothes dryers and weeds, weeds, weeds.......)
This is truly a lovely poem in the true sense of the word. Very touching heartfelt sentiments. |
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by chandramohan on
Thursday, 14th August 2003 @ 08:28:19 AM AEST
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ooommmcchhh..|
a lovely poem.
but the stony heart... hurt me..
hope it will melt atleast in moonlight dance..
keep it on..
***chandramohan |
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Re: Oooooh...please!!!
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by venkat on
Thursday, 14th August 2003 @ 08:30:36 AM AEST
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| Ooooh, thank you my friend..I have seen your new poem.. that is great.. venkat |
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Re: Oooooh...please!!!
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by venkat on
Thursday, 14th August 2003 @ 08:35:58 AM AEST
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Yea..that heart is of moon stone naturally melts down in the moon dance by the heat of stroking..hehehe..thanks my friend.
venkat |
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Re: Oooooh...please!!!
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by karoody on
Saturday, 16th August 2003 @ 02:40:48 AM AEST
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| your words and imagery are magnificent...thankyou.... |
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Re: Oooooh...please!!!
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by krismisevski on
Sunday, 31st August 2003 @ 09:57:53 PM AEST
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"The only course left to you is to give back
The embrace which I gave you in your dream
And return my kisses which too were given".
Great lines here. Very honest. Very passionate.
"The sweet kisses on your lips and
The light stroking of your lovely breasts". Seems a bit too Hall-Marky. It lacks the talent of the previous lines.
Just my take on it.
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Re: Oooooh...please!!!
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by wolfflow on
Wednesday, 3rd September 2003 @ 01:18:53 AM AEST
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a wonderful dance of seduction,
paul |
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Re: Oooooh...please!!!
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Wednesday, 3rd September 2003 @ 04:29:37 PM AEST
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| Beautiful and passionate... |
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Re: Oooooh...please!!!
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 18th November 2003 @ 07:25:20 AM AEST
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Wwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwooooooooowwwwwwwwww!
peace, joy, luv,
emy |
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Re: Oooooh...please!!!
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 5th March 2004 @ 02:40:45 AM AEST
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I can only imagine this melted the heart of stone. If it didn't then she isn't ever giving in. The is a great piece of passion and desire.
Beautiful write.
Rita |
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