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Please No, Nanette
Contributed by
jaeann
on
Sunday, 10th August 2003 @ 06:25:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
AngryPoetry
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Broken window pane
tattered soiled curtain
little toy pop up toaster
evil lived there, I'm certain.
Tilted merry-go-round
chickens in their coops
can you hear the crickets singing?
to her level I could never stoop.
Her punishments were demented
and play time ever so sick
her agendas always perverse
I could never stay back from the stick.
Her momma was blinded
passed out cold or gone
left in her presence
I was a timid little fawn.
Water drinking birdie
somehow mezmerized me forever
rocking me gently into solace
some day there'll be a place of never.
I wanted so to run away
but she's laughing as I hide
the sound of her comes closer
I look down and lose my pride.
Mommy was too tired for me to tell her
I couldn't have if I tried
because Nanette said if I had
Mommy would have died.
She put the fear of love into me
just one psychotic penance after another
I was her muse .... her occupation ......
by my pain she could not be bothered.
Cross all the railroad racks
she cries, "Look out...here it comes...!"
tells me to run real fast now
so she can shoot the b.b. gun.
I loved her and I hated her
as I got older I got better
at both the taking and the giving
sometimes, I was strong and didn't let her.
Then one day I never saw her again
not yesterday or the next
Mommy changed things around
Mommy re-wrote all the checks.
Nannette was sick and hurtul
and kept me in constant pain
I'll never forgive her for any of that
or for hating ****ing trains.
Copyright ©
jaeann
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2003-08-10 18:25:00]
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Re: Please No, Nanette
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by KJ on
Sunday, 10th August 2003 @ 07:24:47 PM AEST
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| wonderful piece, liked it a lot. you can tell the emotion behind it and made me feel as if it was me. even though I do relate to it in a way...great piece |
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Re: Please No, Nanette
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by tinka_belle on
Sunday, 10th August 2003 @ 10:50:58 PM AEST
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this is amazing
the emotion the pain behind this poem you can truely feel |
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Re: Please No, Nanette
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by lovingcritters on
Monday, 11th August 2003 @ 12:36:17 AM AEST
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Wonderful descriptive write . I was there with you throughout the whole ordeal. My Mother's was water.....and horses.....those were the two things that haunt me to this day. But it's wonderful that you know where they came from, so you can recognize them and deal with them. Keep writing and wrting......and each time you do, it will be cut in half for you!
Warm love and many hurs
lovingcritters
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Re: Please No, Nanette
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by Crow on
Monday, 11th August 2003 @ 12:38:21 AM AEST
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you are really something, this is some work.
one thing just jumps out at me, should I ask you is blood thicker than water? i wonder what your answer would be.
"i look down and lose my pride" what feelings this promotes, the way i`m thinking.
just a super write! Crow |
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Re: Please No, Nanette
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by venkat on
Monday, 11th August 2003 @ 03:22:21 AM AEST
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| A good write.. venkat |
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Re: Please No, Nanette
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by gogrl on
Monday, 11th August 2003 @ 03:07:32 PM AEST
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| Wow... That was truly an amazing piece. Thank you for sharing. |
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Re: Please No, Nanette
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by POOBEAR on
Monday, 11th August 2003 @ 08:24:20 PM AEST
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I have to tell you what incredible talent
you have! I felt so many different things
from pain to a kind of eeriness.Really
great writing!
Thanks for this
POOBEAR
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Re: Please No, Nanette
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by DrogedaRain on
Tuesday, 12th August 2003 @ 08:03:22 AM AEST
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| Out of tragedy beauty does rise~! Great write~! |
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