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Handle
Contributed by
Grae
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Friday, 25th July 2003 @ 01:35:00 AM in AEST
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Your untrustworthy you, disturb me
your touch cuts like razorblades
tried to love you, put no else above you
I listened to your voice as it fades
would it kill you just to be real one time
Lie on your own, don't waste mine
Watch you wither like a candle
let go of me, I'm no longer your handle
release, release your ****ing grip
shut the **** up, don't give me lip
Yes, "I am a ***damn vandal
let go let me flow I'm not your handle
Watching you cry is making me laugh
you're just another rock in my path
I've been down this road before, so I'll just kick you outta the way, leave you all alone
with so much left to say
Copyright by Elisa Armour
Copyright ©
Grae
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2003-07-25 01:35:00] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Handle
(User Rating: 1 ) by The_Ice_Princess on
Friday, 22nd August 2003 @ 10:21:58 PM AEST (User
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Good concept for a poem... In the first line, shouldn't the comma be after the word "untrustworthy?" Also, lack of punctuation makes this poem difficult to read correctly. (I know that may be your intended style for the poem, so don't take offence.) Overall, though, I'd say it's lacking in quality... It may just be because I can't get over the random capitalization at the beginning of the lines, or that punctuation deal. However, like I said, good concept. |
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