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She Wants To Sleep But ...
Contributed by
Saira
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Saturday, 19th July 2003 @ 06:35:00 PM in AEST
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When she lies on the bed to sleep,
Pain unlocks the door and seeps
Through the wounded pores and peeps
Into her broken mind and speaks
To her blistered soul that she keeps,
Reminds her of the pain so deep.
Vain strenuous efforts to have some peace,
Distorted dreams give her the creeps,
Snarling darkness emits reek
Of bitter memories, gloomy eyes weep,
Everything looks so hazy and bleak,
Twists her head and makes it reel.
And before she starts to, the word ‘worse’, feel,
Slowly prays again and tries to get some sleep.
Copyright ©
Saira
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2003-07-19 18:35:00]
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Re: She Wants To Sleep But ...
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 19th July 2003 @ 06:47:11 PM AEST
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| awww! vividly sad and well written, may you have peace in your soul and a song of happiness in your heart, hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: She Wants To Sleep But ...
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by shelby on
Saturday, 19th July 2003 @ 07:44:36 PM AEST
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such a deep and moving poem beautiful but sad nicely put together
michelle |
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Re: She Wants To Sleep But ...
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by Ilhar on
Saturday, 19th July 2003 @ 09:01:41 PM AEST
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this was written oh so beautifully, but so dishearteningly sad
Shari |
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Re: She Wants To Sleep But ...
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Sunday, 20th July 2003 @ 12:28:57 AM AEST
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Sad and moving..but lovely..
Jenni |
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Re: She Wants To Sleep But ...
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by Saira on
Sunday, 20th July 2003 @ 07:49:02 AM AEST
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I hope your words come to live one day. Thank you dear friend Nessa for reading and commenting on my poem.
God bless you!
Saira |
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Re: She Wants To Sleep But ...
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by MoonlitAngel on
Sunday, 20th July 2003 @ 07:51:17 AM AEST
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Wow... awesome rhyme scheme. Beautiful, beautiful poem.
~ Moonlit |
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Re: She Wants To Sleep But ...
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by Saira on
Sunday, 20th July 2003 @ 07:52:55 AM AEST
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| Thank you my friend Michelle for your vivid understanding. |
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Re: She Wants To Sleep But ...
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by Saira on
Sunday, 20th July 2003 @ 07:56:53 AM AEST
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| Thank you dear friend Shari for your vivid understading. Sadden me to my core while writing it. |
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Re: She Wants To Sleep But ...
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by Saira on
Sunday, 20th July 2003 @ 08:01:08 AM AEST
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| Thank you Moonlit for reading and liking my poem. :o) |
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Re: She Wants To Sleep But ...
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by Saira on
Sunday, 20th July 2003 @ 08:02:36 AM AEST
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| Thank you dear friend Jenni for your kind remarks. |
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Re: She Wants To Sleep But ...
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by Crow on
Monday, 21st July 2003 @ 01:19:52 AM AEST
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| very well written, touching. Crow |
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Re: She Wants To Sleep But ...
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by yesterdaysfool on
Monday, 21st July 2003 @ 03:41:21 AM AEST
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| Great peom. I have felt that way many times. i love it!! Good job darlin' |
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Re: She Wants To Sleep But ...
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by krystal on
Tuesday, 22nd July 2003 @ 04:36:28 AM AEST
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| Beautiful poem Saira. I myself find that I am the most naive to my feelings at night whilst lying in bed. Your poem deeply touched me for that reason. Thank you... |
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Re: She Wants To Sleep But ...
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by Saira on
Tuesday, 22nd July 2003 @ 08:49:32 AM AEST
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| Thank you my friend for your kind remarks. |
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Re: She Wants To Sleep But ...
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by Saira on
Tuesday, 22nd July 2003 @ 08:58:24 AM AEST
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Thanks dear friend for liking and leaving your kind remarks.
God bless you! |
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Re: She Wants To Sleep But ...
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by Saira on
Tuesday, 22nd July 2003 @ 09:06:01 AM AEST
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These are a few feelings I have expressed, sometimes feel even more than this. It's true :o(
Thank you dear friend for liking and leaving your kind comment.
God Bless you! |
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Re: She Wants To Sleep But ...
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by gohar on
Tuesday, 22nd July 2003 @ 03:45:47 PM AEST
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It is very nice poem, Saira.
I like it very much.
Allah Hafiz.
Ashraf Gohar Goreja |
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Re: She Wants To Sleep But ...
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by Saira on
Tuesday, 22nd July 2003 @ 07:00:40 PM AEST
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| Thank you Sir for your kind remarks. |
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Re: She Wants To Sleep But ...
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by lovingcritters on
Wednesday, 23rd July 2003 @ 08:51:40 PM AEST
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Dear Saira,
I was deeply moved by your description of words, Saira. It amazes me that you are so well read, and your vocabulary has such extention that you can rhyme almost ever single word. Terrific job! Try practicing "Positive" thinking. That has always helped me. Perhaps the reason we think such negative thoughts at night is because we are alone, and we are tired from the stress of the day! When a negative thought pops into your head, immediately replace it with a beautiful thought! Or place yourself in a gorgeous setting, such as a whole hillside of sunflowers on a warm sunny day! That's what I do, and it really works. Try it.
Sad, but so real I could feel your every emotion.
Warm Poetric Love,
Lovingcritters
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Re: She Wants To Sleep But ...
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by Saira on
Thursday, 24th July 2003 @ 09:07:36 AM AEST
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| Thank you dear Connie for your concern. I will surely try it :o) |
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Re: She Wants To Sleep But ...
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by RICHARD_CAMPBELL on
Friday, 25th July 2003 @ 06:12:34 PM AEST
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HI SAIRA,
THIS IS VERY WELL WRITTEN,KEEP UP THE GOOD WRITE. |
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Re: She Wants To Sleep But ...
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by Saira on
Saturday, 26th July 2003 @ 01:41:24 PM AEST
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Hi Richard Cambell,
Thank you for your kind remarks. I'll try!
Saira |
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Re: She Wants To Sleep But ...
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by Kimmie_mac on
Saturday, 2nd August 2003 @ 12:26:41 PM AEST
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| Sad but great I like it 2thumbs up LOL. Kimmie_mac |
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Re: She Wants To Sleep But ...
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by Kimmie_mac on
Saturday, 2nd August 2003 @ 12:26:52 PM AEST
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| Sad but great I like it 2thumbs up LOL. Kimmie_mac |
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Re: She Wants To Sleep But ...
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by Saira on
Saturday, 2nd August 2003 @ 04:54:04 PM AEST
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| Thank you very much dear :o) |
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Re: She Wants To Sleep But ...
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 10th October 2003 @ 05:38:56 PM AEST
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May God bless everyone with a peaceful sleep. Excellent work!.Mashallah u r a very happy person in real life and may u always be...But iam amazed at the way u put painful emotions in words,U r a very good peotess.
love----Nida |
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