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A Smile To Sustain Me
Contributed by
dafremen
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Saturday, 12th July 2003 @ 01:05:00 AM in AEST
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A Smile To Sustain Me
R. Dafremen
Smile a smile for remembrance
Just a moment's expressive beauty
To last this heart a lifetime
For should the fates deem unworthy
My meager, lover's offering
Should time rebuke with distance
One soul's devoted longing
That vision of your happiness
Sweet dream but briefly realized
Shall with this moment's memory
Through the lonely years sustain me.
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dafremen
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2003-07-12 01:05:00]
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Re: A Smile To Sustain Me
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Saturday, 12th July 2003 @ 01:38:48 AM AEST
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Awww this is so beautiful...loved it..
Jenni |
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Re: A Smile To Sustain Me
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by Crow on
Saturday, 12th July 2003 @ 04:45:58 PM AEST
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| what a wonderful write, excellent poem Crow |
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Re: A Smile To Sustain Me
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by DreamWeaver on
Sunday, 13th July 2003 @ 03:17:59 AM AEST
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| Exquisite ... your poetry is sublime ... Jan |
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Re: A Smile To Sustain Me
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 13th July 2003 @ 09:27:48 AM AEST
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| Thank you for your beautiful poetry. |
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Re: A Smile To Sustain Me
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by vincy on
Saturday, 26th July 2003 @ 11:13:20 AM AEST
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The thought and feeling expressed is simply beautiful
the meaning flows but the poem does not, which is ok.
But it would so much more if it could find tempo.
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Re: A Smile To Sustain Me
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by dafremen on
Saturday, 26th July 2003 @ 05:42:14 PM AEST
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I agree. It was a poem that I wrote trying to emulate the style of a very beautiful poem I found while browsing through a book at the Goodwill store. I didn't buy it. Not sure why.
I was broke probably, or got distracted : ) The poem was in the classic style. An oldy but a beauty in my opinion and my attempt to emulate it was probably as meager in comparison to the original as the lover's offering in the poem. I bet we had one thing in common though, we both gave it our all. I don't think anyone that has the courtesy to take time out of their life to read my stuff deserves any less than the very best I have to give. Their gift is certainly more precious than mine.
8 ) Daf |
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