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Pitch Black
Contributed by
Crow
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Monday, 7th July 2003 @ 03:35:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Twisting steel out of control,
slams hard back to earth
once through the rail.
Mere flesh and bone
tear and break,
as metal moans bending to form.
Last minute thoughts,
I wonder what.
Two lives are gone,
no names to live on.
Late in the night
pitch black if you will,
just me, spirits cast.
The cable grows tight,
the pulleys turn.
Screams of the metal this time....... Crow
[things I see in the dead of night]
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Crow
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2003-07-07 03:35:00]
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Re: Pitch Black
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by LovingWhispers on
Monday, 7th July 2003 @ 04:11:23 AM AEST
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I really enjoy your writes.This one has me reading at speed lol..careening into darkness.Very visual...**glad candles are lit*** lol
Sharon |
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Re: Pitch Black
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Monday, 7th July 2003 @ 06:03:03 AM AEST
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| A very dark and vivid poem, I liked this one. |
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Re: Pitch Black
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by Ilhar on
Monday, 7th July 2003 @ 06:28:18 AM AEST
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strong imagery good write
Shari |
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Re: Pitch Black
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by wild_heart_of_fire on
Monday, 7th July 2003 @ 03:03:49 PM AEST
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another great write! i love the imagery. i love your poems. bravo!
~*riki lynn*~ |
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Re: Pitch Black
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by ShadowsCloud on
Monday, 7th July 2003 @ 06:38:40 PM AEST
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This poem is great. I love the imagery in it. I really enjoyed reading it.
ShadowsCloud |
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Re: Pitch Black
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by shelby on
Monday, 7th July 2003 @ 09:08:56 PM AEST
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vivid images and details in this poem, it draws me in.
michelle |
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Re: Pitch Black
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by Crow on
Monday, 7th July 2003 @ 11:46:38 PM AEST
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| thank you, I don`t write dark alot so its tough for me. takes me awhile to finish. Crow |
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Re: Pitch Black
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by Crow on
Monday, 7th July 2003 @ 11:56:21 PM AEST
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| thank you, i see some violent crashes sometimes. Crow |
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Re: Pitch Black
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by Crow on
Tuesday, 8th July 2003 @ 12:05:57 AM AEST
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thank you, i have a hard time with this style
Crow |
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Re: Pitch Black
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by Crow on
Tuesday, 8th July 2003 @ 12:17:24 AM AEST
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| thank you riki, i have to write and rewrite until it makes sense, or at least its readable. if you see a piece thats horrid! tell me. everyone is so nice here. Crow |
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Re: Pitch Black
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by Crow on
Tuesday, 8th July 2003 @ 12:23:20 AM AEST
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thank you for looking, i have a few dark poems they are not my favorite, i like heros
and heartaches. Crow |
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Re: Pitch Black
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by venkat on
Tuesday, 8th July 2003 @ 02:29:22 AM AEST
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| very dark..I can see the images..A good write.. venkat |
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Re: Pitch Black
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 8th July 2003 @ 12:35:01 PM AEST
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| excellent dark write *shivers* lol, hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Pitch Black
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by Crow on
Thursday, 10th July 2003 @ 08:37:18 PM AEST
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thank you for reading this little piece,
i don`t write dark much, i have very few .
things happen out in the night, and i try to tell a small story poetic. Crow |
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Re: Pitch Black
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by Crow on
Thursday, 10th July 2003 @ 08:48:01 PM AEST
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| thank you for looking, i try to tell a small story, a little poetic. writing dark is hard for me i don`t do a lot. Crow |
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Re: Pitch Black
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by Crow on
Thursday, 10th July 2003 @ 08:53:07 PM AEST
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you won`t see much of this, to tough for me. i can`t write dark very well.
thank you for looking. Crow |
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Re: Pitch Black
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by norm on
Saturday, 12th July 2003 @ 05:14:10 PM AEST
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In the world of Buck Rogers
Where all is on the shelf
You plug in Longitude and Latitude
The car takes you by itself.
It's then that dent and crash
will be a thing that is past,
I guess until that time
accidents are 12 for a dime
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Re: Pitch Black
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by norm on
Saturday, 12th July 2003 @ 05:14:11 PM AEST
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In the world of Buck Rogers
Where all is on the shelf
You plug in Longitude and Latitude
The car takes you by itself.
It's then that dent and crash
will be a thing that is past,
I guess until that time
accidents are 12 for a dime
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Re: Pitch Black
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by Kimmie_mac on
Wednesday, 23rd July 2003 @ 09:32:49 AM AEST
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| Very vivid and strong. I like it. Kimmie_mac |
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Re: Pitch Black
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by Crow on
Thursday, 14th August 2003 @ 09:26:54 PM AEST
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| thank you, there is not to many I witness, had to write about this one. Crow |
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