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Contributed by
zeroelysium
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Wednesday, 25th June 2003 @ 01:25:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
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the clock is ticking and its laughin in my face
time passing for everthing else but me
left here in my little glass box
let me out
let me breath
let me grow with you
not apart form you
i watch the world change
i watch you drifting away
changing with the outside...
wondering why you put me here
if you were not going to stay
let me out
let me breath
let me grow with you
not apart form you
its hard for me you see
its hard for you i see
you never put me here before
i want out
out to breath
out to grow with you
no apart from you
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2003-06-25 01:25:00]
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Re: No Title
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by Ilhar on
Wednesday, 25th June 2003 @ 04:41:17 AM AEST
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good write kid
Love Mom |
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Re: No Title
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by vincy on
Wednesday, 25th June 2003 @ 09:53:56 PM AEST
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There's some movement happening here
you should explore it, take it further
"Left out" or "Time out" can be appropriate titles
the theme is about changing together with the
other person rather than being left behind, ignored.
This poem has potential for further development. |
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Re: No Title
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by Percursors on
Saturday, 28th June 2003 @ 09:13:38 PM AEST
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| GOOD WRITE...i liked it alot... |
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