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kindred flames.
Contributed by
obsidian_angel
on
Saturday, 7th June 2003 @ 06:05:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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I remember that day and how you made me feel, delicate and precious and so surreal,
i took your hand and fell into your arms,
and i felt secure and safe from harm.
I thought that forever had just disappeared,
you were evrything i'd ever loved, and feared,
time didnt matter 'cause you were here with me,
and i knew that we were meant to be.
As i looked into your grey and violet eyes,
i saw your oul and fell through your guise,
you were soft and gentle behined your exterior,
and next to your ethereality i looked so inferior,
You held your lips against mine and i felt a flush,
i fell into your fathomless heart in a spiritual rush,
i swear that for eternity i will remember this,
but you pulled away the moment that would've made it a kiss.
you said that you hated what you were feeling,
your heart had been brocken and you were still healing,
you said you didnt want to feel love again,
and that you regretted what had happened just then.
i didnt believe you could be so cruel,
but i still wondered how i could be such a fool,
a tear fell from your eye and you turned to go,
(i said) what did i do to make you hate me so?
of course i dont hate you, you said with a cry,
this feeling for you, i cant deny,
but my love for you will tear us apart,
and i cant bare another brocken heart.
i swore that i would never hurt you,
wiped the tears from your eyes and wrapped my eyes around you,
and once again your lips i touched,
to show you that i loved you so much.
You put your arms around me to,
'i never ever want to let go of you',
i held you tight in a lovers embrace,
then broke away to look at your face.
Your grey, violet eyes bore into mine,
and a shiver went up and down my spine,
you are my rose, my wonderful curse,
and from now until the end of time you will own my universe.....
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obsidian_angel
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2003-06-07 18:05:00] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: kindred flames.
(User Rating: 1 ) by Ilhar on
Saturday, 7th June 2003 @ 07:02:53 PM AEST (User
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beautiful
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Re: kindred flames.
(User Rating: 1 ) by MoonlitAngel on
Saturday, 7th June 2003 @ 08:07:27 PM AEST (User
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Oh wow that's beautiful...
~ Moonlit |
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Re: kindred flames.
(User Rating: 0 ) by Former_Member on
Saturday, 14th June 2003 @ 10:37:26 AM AEST (User
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That was nice. Try not to use too many long words because it can be a little over-bearing, especially in the same line (i.e - i fell into your fathomless heart in a spiritual rush). Oh, and there's no c in broken. |
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Re: kindred flames.
(User Rating: 0 ) by Former_Member on
Monday, 16th June 2003 @ 10:50:32 AM AEST (User
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Yeah i totaly agree using loads of big words makes it tacky, like your just showing off and trying to sound clever. |
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Re: kindred flames.
(User Rating: 1 ) by viki on
Friday, 13th February 2004 @ 11:46:10 AM AEST (User
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I liked your poem. Know the feeling. |
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