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The Brick, A Follow Up
Contributed by
Solmyr1404
on
Thursday, 3rd March 2016 @ 08:26:32 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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There/'/s a brick,
It haunts me.
The words I wrote,
After all these years,
They/'/re still with me.
Twelve years since penned,
No longer in school.
Still it remains unpainted,
Unchanged, but weathered,
Even as me.
Forgive the grammar,
It merely fit.
I remember the glimmer of hope
Shining through the fog and clouds.
Through now with it/'/s mocking,
It/'/s gone,
Leaving only the pain,
Memories of abuse.
The query posed at the end?
The answer has been revealed.
No.
Copyright ©
Solmyr1404
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2016-03-03 20:26:32] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: The Brick, A Follow Up
(User Rating: 1 ) by Invierno on
Thursday, 10th March 2016 @ 06:50:28 AM AEST (User
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Keep writing and the answer WILL be revealed. It is inside you, of course, so how can it not be pulled back and viewed?
I am loathe to distribute even positive critical advice, but will add that you needn/'/t EVER apologize for your use of words...they are yours to abuse, beautify or discard...and to detract from within a poem to apologize is simply not needed, " Forgive the grammar,
It merely fit.". If you feel that strongly, write a poem about your grammar. There is NOTHING that is beyond the examination of our mind and execution of our pen.
I enjoyed your poem and now must go read, /'/The Brick/'/.
Invierno
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