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The Chalice
Contributed by
Rakerman1999
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Wednesday, 2nd March 2016 @ 09:26:01 PM in AEST
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There was a man who took a fall
Yet lovely words flowed from his lips
He puts them in a silver chalice
And from it his fair lady sips
As past and future blend together
Intoxicated by this drink
Her yesterdays become tomorrows
And takes her poor mind to the brink.
Uncertain now about the present
Reality is cast aside
Here and now, there and then,
All moments of her life collide
And swirl as if a blinding snow
A blizzard of regret it seems
That causes fragile hopes to break
Into a million shattered dreams.
Uncaring for the pain he caused
This fallen man refills the cup
With poison of his tender words
Tainting the glass from which she"d sup
And unaware, she drains the chalice
Relishing it to the last
And in a silent stupor watches
As what could be becomes the past.
Rakerman
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Rakerman1999
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Re: The Chalice
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 2nd March 2016 @ 10:35:27 PM AEST
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| Yes I/'/m definitely a fan. That first stanza: wow. This reminded me of a silver tongued man mesmerizing a woman with speech. I really liked the concept |
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Re: The Chalice
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by softerware on
Saturday, 5th March 2016 @ 06:48:01 PM AEST
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A stunning craft of rhyme and story! Imagination blended with hard and fast rules of rhythm and sound; no easy task.
But, easy to read and enjoy the visuals you have created in this tale.
A splendid piece of enjoyment for readers. Thank you for working so hard to bring us this story in the music of your words. Was like sitting in a rocking chair with someone singing to you! Bravo!
sofsterware
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Re: The Chalice
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by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 14th April 2016 @ 02:12:27 PM AEST
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beautifully flowing lines, brilliant poetry off one of the finest of golden pens.....
hugs n love nessa
roses at your feet
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Re: The Chalice
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by ever1der on
Monday, 17th October 2016 @ 07:50:10 AM AEST
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Never believe a poets words ... one by one they lead to a cliff and if believed ... yes, over its edge and to a gruesome death. This is one I have never read. The best part for me are the words
"All moments of her life collide
And swirl as if a blinding snow
A blizzard of regret it seems
That causes fragile hopes to break
Into a million shattered dreams. "
All of it is beautiful and fitting for many I think.
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