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Smoke In a Glass
Contributed by
dvtpdw
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Thursday, 25th February 2016 @ 12:47:28 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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The air smells sweet as it swirls you around
Road/'/s warm as your feet touch the ground
There/'/s nothing to hold your chances back
As you try to capture grey smoke with a glass
The smoke flicks forward inches from your grasp
You stumble over rocks appearing on the path
Worry floods as you ponder your ability to succeed
Can you contain white smoke under a glass
Air begins to thicken as you struggle to sigh
Stars laugh as you attempt just one more try
Victory winks as you reach one final time
Capturing precious smoke with a glass
Butterflies and rainbows are what you did seek
The truth can/'/t match a dream/'/s little peek
What/'/s cherished won/'/t thrive in a mortal vase
Life reveals as you release smoke from a glass
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Re: Smoke In a Glass
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by JamesStockdale on
Thursday, 25th February 2016 @ 01:22:41 PM AEST
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Very nice write. Well done and rather unique.
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Re: Smoke In a Glass
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 25th February 2016 @ 04:15:09 PM AEST
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It/'/s been a while. Glad to see you back. Your poems never fail to impress.
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Tim |
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Re: Smoke In a Glass
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by softerware on
Friday, 26th February 2016 @ 10:03:16 PM AEST
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We can grasp life but we can/'/t contain it!
What a wonderful story of seeking to preserve and sustain the unsustainable! Hope, joy, satisfaction, love, freedom, friendship, wisdom, do not lend themselves to captivity-- as you point out "smoke under a glass" is a mortal vase!
My favorite line is "the truth can/'/t match a dreams little peek." And therein lies the lesson of your story. We all find this out as time goes by; but you have said is so well that perhaps you have planted the seeds of knowledge in those who hope to stop time to keep the best of the moment. |
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Re: Smoke In a Glass
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 16th April 2016 @ 10:26:47 PM AEST
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beautiful imagery,
hugs n love nessa |
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