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Someday Maybe
Contributed by
jamesstockdale
on
Monday, 22nd February 2016 @ 09:05:53 AM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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Come on baby
Let/'/s get together and
Reconcile our ways
Wash away all of the bad
Move forward, forget the past
Let/'/s walk toward the horizon
Hand in hand
Follow the rays to a shining sun
Our future will be much brighter when
We follow the rays
Walking hand in hand
With my beautiful one
The one I love
Over the horizon to a beautiful sun
Yeah walking hand in hand
To our promised land
Just you wait and see
How great our
Renewed love will be
Forget all of the hate
Clear the slate
Before it/'/s too late
Yeah I want to walk all over this land
Hand in hand
Over the horizon
With the one I love
On our way to a better day
Follow the rays with my
Beautiful one
To the shining sun
You just wait and see
How great our
Renewed love will be
Oh someday baby
Yeah someday baby
You and me
Just you wait and see
Oh baby, baby,
Someday maybe
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jamesstockdale
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2016-02-22 09:05:53] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Someday Maybe
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 23rd February 2016 @ 03:18:28 AM AEST (User
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Nice!!!! Good luck with that!! This gave me a happy face.
Thanks,
Tim |
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Re: Someday Maybe
(User Rating: 1 ) by hauntedscorp on
Wednesday, 24th February 2016 @ 11:23:41 AM AEST (User
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After a couple of reads, and clearing through the sing-song-y nature to this, I think I have decided the words don/'/t ring authentic. Hmm, not the //words//, per se, but the underlying promise that is implied. I think this piece was born out of love, but to me there is a thin coat of despair that weighs heavy on the outcome. I like how you chose a noncommittal ending- /'/someday maybe/'/ ... To me, this is a multifaceted write. A calm and serene surface read belying turbulent undercurrents. Great job.
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Re: Someday Maybe
(User Rating: 1 ) by Invierno on
Friday, 11th March 2016 @ 07:33:33 AM AEST (User
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How cool! An old fashioned plea for peace found in shared love. An eternal concept that gets lost in this cold new world.
Mike |
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Re: Someday Maybe
(User Rating: 1 ) by Invierno on
Friday, 11th March 2016 @ 07:34:15 AM AEST (User
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How cool! An old fashioned plea for peace found in shared love. An eternal concept that gets lost in this cold new world.
Mike |
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