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These Are The Things
Contributed by
jamesstockdale
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Saturday, 30th January 2016 @ 12:45:02 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Just like a blade of grass
Tickling at my feet
A strawberry seed
Caught between my teeth
The choking smell
Of wintergreen all over my sheets
Dirt that supersedes
What was once neat
A cold and cloudy sun
When I long for heat
Traveling so far
To see what/'/s next door
Short sighted me
As you walk from view
These are the things
That you do to me
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jamesstockdale
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2016-01-30 12:45:02]
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Re: These Are The Things
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by xHeathenx on
Saturday, 30th January 2016 @ 02:43:16 PM AEST
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| I like all the things, and even found myself with a nice smile, but I think that one thing would maybe make use of something. I/'/ll message you and see if you agree. |
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Re: These Are The Things
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by softerware on
Saturday, 30th January 2016 @ 06:40:45 PM AEST
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You have told a tale of what longing can do to us.
Even make the sun cold!
My favorite line is --Traveling so far to see what/'/s next door!
We choose to love; we do not choose how it will change our lives! This is the writing of a romantic at heart. May you never be cured!
softerware
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Re: These Are The Things
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 9th September 2020 @ 05:26:19 AM AEST
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//Do I detect some sarcasm? Did anyone else notice that? It/'/s just me?
No, don/'/t think so. James Stockdale is pretty damn clever.
Sorry if I/'/m off base but being cold and the "choking smell of wintergreen"turn the pages and I say I like the twist.
Thanks,
Dugan
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