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Faded Ink And Drying Flowers
Contributed by
ever1der
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Tuesday, 19th January 2016 @ 01:44:20 PM in AEST
Topic:
LoveRemembered
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She sits beside her window
soft sunlight streaming in.
Drowsiness overtakes her
as chest touches her chin.
Head bounces back, eyes open wide
a smile on her face.
Once again she tries to read
but she has lost her place.
Sunshine gone, replaced with clouds
dark promises of rain.
Booming thunder clears the air
with drizzles on the pane.
Book now closed upon her lap
her gaze is far away.
Memories waltzing in her mind
she sees another day.
Fingers trace her pink full lips
remembering a kiss ...
Rain fell then, so long ago
on shadowed, secret bliss.
Ink now faded, flowers dried
so long ago enclosed.
The tale is told upon the page
but now the book is closed.
Copyright ©
ever1der
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2016-01-19 13:44:20]
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Re: Faded Ink And Drying Flowers
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 19th January 2016 @ 03:00:04 PM AEST
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truly beautiful,
hugs n/'/ love nessa |
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Re: Faded Ink And Drying Flowers
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by Jenni_K on
Wednesday, 20th January 2016 @ 06:00:28 AM AEST
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Love it!! Were you writing about me? lol.
Great job.
Jenni_K |
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Re: Faded Ink And Drying Flowers
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by cathartic on
Wednesday, 20th January 2016 @ 06:42:53 AM AEST
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well done.
"memories waltzing in her mind" love that line. |
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Re: Faded Ink And Drying Flowers
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by irisblue on
Wednesday, 20th January 2016 @ 05:32:13 PM AEST
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| oh I love this intriguing write!!!! For a moment I felt like I was that girl...... |
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Re: Faded Ink And Drying Flowers
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by xHeathenx on
Thursday, 21st January 2016 @ 09:25:44 PM AEST
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Very well done. I enjoyed it, with a starting bit of skepticism that turned into excited anticipation.
My favorite thing, is that there/'/s a sense of gone, and a lack of closure, but at the same time there/'/s a sense of peace. It/'/s as if we/'/re feeling the sense of missing, but all the while celebrating what it is we miss with the jaunt of the flow you/'/ve given it. Again it/'/s enjoyable all the more with that flow.
The line "Memories waltzing in her mind" was great because of the elegance and beauty in it.
The lines "She lives to see another day" and "drizzles on the pane" are awesome because it instinctively reinforces a sense of well-being and optimistic tone and cadence, and I love it. This poem gives hope. :) |
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Re: Faded Ink And Drying Flowers
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by unknown_utopia on
Thursday, 28th January 2016 @ 11:12:08 AM AEST
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loved this poem
well done..... |
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Re: Faded Ink And Drying Flowers
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 4th February 2016 @ 08:31:59 AM AEST
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| Wow. You/'/re a good poet and I/'/m gonna thumb through your other poems now. I really liked this you opened strong and ended stronger |
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Re: Faded Ink And Drying Flowers
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by FireStarter on
Friday, 21st October 2016 @ 03:38:04 PM AEST
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| This is so beautiful |
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