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Heyyeh babe
Contributed by
ladyfawn
on
Thursday, 29th May 2003 @ 12:05:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
FriendshipPoetry
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hey babe it wasn't too hard to figure out your game
really only took a 'lill time to see all your wicked ways,
~*~
so who might be the next poetess on your list?
oooo make sure she'd like a Friend so she can't resist,
love pure, true and beautiful is what you name
but it is all about you; so it is all the same,
the funny thing is we all know about each other
except for the poetic nurse we wouldn't think to bother,
soon she too will see that you are not who you say
and we all will be there for her on that day,
there's a handful of us ladies who know you quite well
and those cute convincing little lies you love to tell,
when through with us those mean hateful things you speak
we are women, but buddy, we aren't blind nor weak,
i am so verrrrrrrrrry disapointed in you right now; and
you likely won't be reading this without a frown in your brow,
but mr. perfect i am still going to tell you
if i Gave a dollar i couldn't even sell you,
~*~
none of the women your now playing are as slow
as me who dumbly love you in case you care to know,
and some of my friends have known me for years
so when you made me cry and shed those tears,
over words you say i said; but never did-
you really ought to sit back, stop, and think,
for all the people who Really love me unconditionally
mailed me the truth of your words every single day,
so if you can write and be a nice fellow
look back, look front, transend into conscienceness, be mellow,
remembering women are not musical instruments for you to play
and maybe grow up a little and mind the lies you say,
know this; our souls, minds n' hearts thank you, are quite whole
it is within' Your friendship n' love resides the true hole,
you need to sit back and find the Real You
because honestly, right now nothing your saying is true.
~*~
*and it would not hurt you to be totally honest: when
you said i was unworthy of you, it was not said in jest*
Copyright ©
ladyfawn
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2003-05-29 12:05:00] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Heyyeh babe
(User Rating: 1 ) by LOWMAN613 on
Thursday, 29th May 2003 @ 12:24:02 PM AEST (User
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Nessa,Yea they know how to fool us dont they?! LOL! Wow what a poem! Great write here! BRAVO! Christina |
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Re: Heyyeh babe
(User Rating: 1 ) by Wrybod on
Thursday, 29th May 2003 @ 12:52:43 PM AEST (User
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Is this some internet character or is he from your physical life? |
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Re: Heyyeh babe
(User Rating: 1 ) by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 29th May 2003 @ 01:02:29 PM AEST (User
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if you read a few of my poems or run down my list you will know who, yes on the net, here, ~hugs nessa |
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Re: Heyyeh babe
(User Rating: 1 ) by roisin on
Thursday, 29th May 2003 @ 01:17:14 PM AEST (User
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nessa...a very quick comment as I am on my lunch hour...with a heavy heart I have written you both and I am hoping that this poem puts an end to this madness...my concerns are for you both and your well being....please take care of yourselves
rosie |
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Re: Heyyeh babe
(User Rating: 1 ) by Ilhar on
Thursday, 29th May 2003 @ 01:33:57 PM AEST (User
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you go girl! great poem...but he is not alone in this game there have been others who play the same game...take notice guys the women are wising up
Shari |
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Re: Heyyeh babe
(User Rating: 1 ) by Stalkee on
Thursday, 29th May 2003 @ 04:12:49 PM AEST (User
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ive been awaiting your next poem since the last one you wrote. and wow! this was great...i enjoyed this one a lot! thanks for sharing your poetry with me |
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Re: Heyyeh babe
(User Rating: 1 ) by wyrd_faerie on
Thursday, 29th May 2003 @ 04:35:47 PM AEST (User
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wow! i love it...very nice... |
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Re: Heyyeh babe
(User Rating: 1 ) by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Thursday, 29th May 2003 @ 05:10:27 PM AEST (User
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Well grrl, I am soooo glad to see that you have picked yourself up, dusted yourself off...and are again rearing to go!!!!!
Great, cleansing write...
Luve and hugs,
Jenni
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Re: Heyyeh babe
(User Rating: 1 ) by princesspurty on
Thursday, 29th May 2003 @ 07:39:06 PM AEST (User
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very well put, men should be wise to this take as a warning, very well said! |
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Re: Heyyeh babe
(User Rating: 1 ) by The_Phantom on
Thursday, 29th May 2003 @ 08:56:35 PM AEST (User
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Come on Ladyfawn,
Not all men are like that, Some of us do tell the truth, like me. Anyway great write I hope you feel better now nice to see you agan.
Much Love
The Phantom |
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Re: Heyyeh babe
(User Rating: 1 ) by shelby on
Thursday, 29th May 2003 @ 10:54:27 PM AEST (User
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wow Ness you sure put a point across here. This is a great write and full of meaning. Good message!!
Michelle |
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Re: Heyyeh babe
(User Rating: 1 ) by Lone_er on
Thursday, 29th May 2003 @ 11:56:29 PM AEST (User
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I admire your courage maam. Proud of you. Russ |
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Re: Heyyeh babe
(User Rating: 1 ) by ChokingHazard on
Friday, 30th May 2003 @ 02:19:31 AM AEST (User
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very tasteful job here hun, i think you did this perfectly...hope everything works out
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Re: Heyyeh babe
(User Rating: 1 ) by venkat on
Friday, 30th May 2003 @ 05:20:51 AM AEST (User
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" Women are not musical instruments for you to play" a memorable line..well written. venkat |
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Re: Heyyeh babe
(User Rating: 1 ) by LovingWhispers on
Friday, 30th May 2003 @ 11:20:40 AM AEST (User
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"But mr. perfect i am still going to tell you
if i Gave a dollar i couldn't even sell you,"
Grrreat words!!!!
The whole write is simply "out there,in your face and totally awesome" I love straight forwardness and from the sounds of this poem,whoever it is aimed he will surely,hopefully realise his selfish and deceitful ways.If not,then......one day he will DEFINATELY face a higher judgement.I hope this write has helped you to heal a little.You could always do what I do and cleanse yourself with a walk in the rain *smiles*...Love and hugs,,,Sharon |
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Re: Heyyeh babe
(User Rating: 1 ) by LovingWhispers on
Friday, 30th May 2003 @ 11:21:24 AM AEST (User
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"But mr. perfect i am still going to tell you
if i Gave a dollar i couldn't even sell you,"
Grrreat words!!!!
The whole write is simply "out there,in your face and totally awesome" I love straight forwardness and from the sounds of this poem,whoever it is aimed at, he will surely,hopefully realise his selfish and deceitful ways.If not,then......one day he will DEFINATELY face a higher judgement.I hope this write has helped you to heal a little.You could always do what I do and cleanse yourself with a walk in the rain *smiles*...Love and hugs,,,Sharon |
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Re: Heyyeh babe
(User Rating: 1 ) by norm on
Monday, 2nd June 2003 @ 02:51:26 PM AEST (User
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The poem is super ...but it scares me somewhat. Too many agreements were
issued by your buddies. ..
The poem tells a story of surmise...but,
it supposses women are dull and stupid
creatures...but...such is not the case..there-
fore...is it possible, you wanted to be lied to..
You'll notice, I am not afraid to be in the
line of fire..if things get rough..i'll hide in
the closet..
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Re: Heyyeh babe
(User Rating: 1 ) by Smooth on
Monday, 2nd June 2003 @ 07:50:24 PM AEST (User
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wow! this is outstanding. What a wonderful display of courage, cleansing and standing up to say ... LET ME BE HEARD. This write shows great strength and powerful use of prose. At the risk of sounding pedestrian, You go girl! |
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