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Trust Became Dust
Contributed by
jamesstockdale
on
Sunday, 25th October 2015 @ 09:53:48 AM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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Thoughts of you
Albeit new
The happy times
We once shared
Scrambled up in my mind
No longer there to compare
Those distorted realities
Were so well defined
Remember the days
When you were mine
Love was brand new and oh so divine
You threw it all away
It wasn't me but you
That's what you once said
With the passing of time
You're just a distant memory
Clouded in haze
Were the days
Since we parted ways
The love I had for you
Those faded jaded memories
Trust became dust
Lust turned to rust
And it all blew away
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jamesstockdale
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2015-10-25 09:53:48]
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Re: Trust Became Dust
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by Invierno on
Sunday, 25th October 2015 @ 11:39:07 AM AEST
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"Trust became dust
Lust turned to rust
And it all blew away"
A tragedy rarely well more well phrased.
Invierno |
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Re: Trust Became Dust
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by xHeathenx on
Sunday, 25th October 2015 @ 12:15:33 PM AEST
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The last four lines, give an interesting thought. It seems to me a very poetic way of describing the emotional state of depression, though it's hard to say for sure.
Thanks for the chance to picture something new James. :)
-Mark |
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Re: Trust Became Dust
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 27th October 2015 @ 03:54:05 AM AEST
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Your poems like this one always bring to mind my second wifey poo.
Those last five lines just wrap it up expertly and drive the message home with excellent power.
Thanks,
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Re: Trust Became Dust
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by legato29 on
Tuesday, 27th October 2015 @ 10:20:12 AM AEST
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Wow this elicits such beautiful imagery. Simply elegant writing! As people have said before, the last section is particularly magical. You set up the "ay" sound so that it lingers in the mind until the last line!
"Clouded in haze
Were the days
Since we parted ways...
....and it all blew away"
Just beautiful!
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Re: Trust Became Dust
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by shelby on
Sunday, 1st November 2015 @ 05:46:35 PM AEST
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Start to finish a nice and flowing read,deeply emotional.
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Re: Trust Became Dust
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 1st November 2015 @ 11:18:49 PM AEST
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some things just aren't meant to be- this poem however is a
thing of beauty created from a painful memory, poetry at its
finest:)
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Trust Became Dust
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by kmec1990 on
Monday, 23rd November 2015 @ 10:00:28 PM AEST
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Trust became dust love this!
Great write.
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