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Still Not Gone
Contributed by
Deidra_Carmichael
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Wednesday, 21st October 2015 @ 07:53:03 PM in AEST
Topic:
goodbyepoetry
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I told you this is the end
And only now have you come to accept it
I don't blame you since I have been discreet
Little by little was the way I thought was most just
I've left but still I'm not gone
Oh the ironic academic schedule we share
I wish that I just didn't even care
Alas my struggle is real now that our conflict is entirely revealed
The question you ask now is what are we going to do
Easy, I'll sit far away and avoid you
Callous and cold it may very well seem
But I'd rather you numb to me than lost in a false dream
How I wish I could continue this rhyme
But more important are the thoughts weighing on my mind
The upcoming days will prove tough for sure
Still we have to pull through, growing with the passing of time
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Deidra_Carmichael
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2015-10-21 19:53:03]
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Re: Still Not Gone
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by JamesStockdale on
Wednesday, 21st October 2015 @ 10:05:29 PM AEST
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Great write.
If it's reality, be friends and move on.
Keep it simple and drama free.
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Re: Still Not Gone
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by xHeathenx on
Thursday, 22nd October 2015 @ 02:57:04 PM AEST
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The line "Easy, I'll sit far away and avoid you." Made me laugh inside. An uncontrollable smile made its way to my face. As it should be obvious of a course of action, the seemingly bitter and sardonic(I didn't even know I knew that word and yet it just came to me.) caught me by surprise. :)
Nicely done. :)
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Re: Still Not Gone
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by northernlights on
Thursday, 22nd October 2015 @ 10:51:31 PM AEST
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| But I'd rather you numb to me! Ironically the verbal expression of wanting to numb and avoid the pain highlights the agony and frustration of knowing there is no avoiding the pain.Brutal and honestly written. |
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Re: Still Not Gone
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 23rd October 2015 @ 08:10:23 AM AEST
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| Who said: 'You have to be cruel to be kind' ? Someone or other, and I bet that someone was the one being cruel. It's a difficult one, and you've captured the dilemma rather nicely here. |
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