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Always watching
Contributed by
Percursors
on
Thursday, 29th May 2003 @ 08:05:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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I’m standing all alone
all alone in a field
the clouds start to roll faster
the clouds start to grow thicker
the sun starts to go away
the sounds starts to fade
not far away
in a wooded place
I peer
someone near to the ground
I fear
I’m standing not alone
not alone in a field
the wind starts to swirl
starts to swirl my hair in my face
I no longer can see the wooded place
fear starts to move near
it peers at me
I’m scared
“my dear”
it sighed in a nasty high
“come over here”
I’m standing not alone
not alone in the woods
I start to cry
as it eats me alive
no narrow escape
no handsome man in a red cape
what did I do to get here
where did I go wrong
my bread crumbs have been eatin’
no retracing my foot steps today
for I shall be eatin’
becuz’ I let evil have it’s way
I will die becuz’ I sinned
or I will live if I’m forgivin’
I awake from the dream with a new vison on life
I’ll stay out of trouble
and do what I know to be right
becuz’ evil and curiosity
may cost me my life
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Percursors
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2003-05-29 08:05:00] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Always watching
(User Rating: 1 ) by Ilhar on
Thursday, 29th May 2003 @ 08:39:52 AM AEST (User
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interesting write
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Re: Always watching
(User Rating: 1 ) by LadyDama on
Thursday, 29th May 2003 @ 09:35:57 AM AEST (User
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i like the fairy tale analogies and the "modern" way of spelling at the end... gives it a younger feel to a scary poem... the last four lines are powerful... blessings... |
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Re: Always watching
(User Rating: 1 ) by knowWhat_kind on
Thursday, 5th June 2003 @ 12:31:55 AM AEST (User
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OMG Cassie I really love that poem that sounds really cool. You write like way cool poetry. Great write.
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Re: Always watching
(User Rating: 1 ) by Silent-Cry on
Sunday, 8th June 2003 @ 01:49:44 PM AEST (User
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i like it very much
joelle |
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