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is this slow enough, buddy
Contributed by
ming
on
Sunday, 4th October 2015 @ 11:52:45 AM in AEST
Topic:
abstract
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words move
inky against
the white
should
the utterance
be an undoing
with the tug
of the first letter/feel
brimming with
the unsaid
instead I go cubist
my words tectonic
and akimbo
and if needed
to climb
dropping notes
pen wide open
to all the alchemy
in MY world
where even 'they"
can't smash
ideas shooting
strings of gray matter
and laying my epiphany/page/poem
while kneeling in my heart
getting at the wall
with a ball-point/ball-peen
hammer/pen
valves still
opening and closing
laughing whisper-smoke
messages I...I am...I am different.
Copyright ©
ming
... [
2015-10-04 11:52:45]
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Re: is this slow enough, buddy
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 5th October 2015 @ 01:38:28 AM AEST
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| Quite brilliant. I had a flush of emotion reading this. It was like chalk and cheese snuggled up on a sofa watching old movies. I get you, buddy, and impressed I am. We must be ourselves, whatever that might be. If we don't put our heads above the parapet, we'd never be shot at, and what's the point of that? |
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Re: is this slow enough, buddy
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by softerware on
Thursday, 8th October 2015 @ 09:23:33 PM AEST
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Your self description finds elements of bittersweet; violence; separation; and tornados of thoughts that will be flung with a hammer/pen no doubt! To capture the "whisper-smoke messages" we must accept our uniqueness; blood and all..and embrace the wisdom as well as the insanity.
You have said it so much better than I have ever heard it expressed.
softerware |
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Re: is this slow enough, buddy
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by Invierno on
Friday, 9th October 2015 @ 07:09:44 AM AEST
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elementally perfect
Invierno |
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Re: is this slow enough, buddy
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by Invierno on
Friday, 16th October 2015 @ 06:53:10 PM AEST
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| You are so good |
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Re: is this slow enough, buddy
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 19th October 2015 @ 09:32:56 AM AEST
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This is just pure brilliance.
If I look directly at it I fear I'd go blind.
Really, really, superb write,
Mickey. |
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