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on the brink
Contributed by
ming
on
Sunday, 27th September 2015 @ 12:14:10 PM in AEST
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just leave
the door
open
hold up the sky
or tear it
down
reap the whirlwind
but don't miss
the insights
glittering
like sugar
on velvet
and a bleeding
metaphor with all
its bones broken
and programmed
like a clockwork
doll
and maybe I can't
fit into my own space
anymore...
here endeth
the poem.
Copyright ©
ming
... [
2015-09-27 12:14:10]
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Re: on the brink
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 27th September 2015 @ 01:45:01 PM AEST
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| Nice |
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Re: on the brink
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 27th September 2015 @ 04:27:23 PM AEST
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Always leave the door open, you may be locking out your brother. Paradoxically, the sky holds us up. Reap the whirlwind, but don't miss the lessons. Glittering like sugar on velvet is a wonderful metaphor. And the thought of a bleeding metaphor with its bones broken will stay with me.
We're all programmed like clockwork dolls, we just can't see it. I'm now thinking of fitting into my own space, and I'm not sure that i want to go there. The poem might have endeth, but in carries on in this mind. Than you. |
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Re: on the brink
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by irisblue on
Sunday, 27th September 2015 @ 06:44:41 PM AEST
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| brilliant poem! |
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Re: on the brink
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by Invierno on
Friday, 2nd October 2015 @ 10:57:24 PM AEST
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So cool.
"reap the whirlwind
but don't miss
the insights
glittering
like sugar
on velvet
and a bleeding
metaphor with all
its bones broken
and programmed
like a clockwork
doll"
Speechless/
Invierno |
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