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Safe Harbor
Contributed by
softerware
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Sunday, 26th July 2015 @ 10:48:04 PM in AEST
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I know it’s late, but won’t you wait, before you close your door?
I’m not at all the woman that came here once before.
I’m begging you to lie to me; I’m ready to believe.
The truth has shattered all I am; I long to be deceived.
I have no strength, I have no love; I have no place to go.
I have no pride; I have no fear; and I don’t care who knows.
Let me hide for just tonight; Cloak me in your schemes;
Weave a web so thick with lies, it muffles out the screams.
There’s nothing you need do for me, your breathing will suffice;
The sound of no one there has turned my heart as cold as ice.
Somehow, some way , I’ll pay you back; tonight I need to borrow;
A pillow fragrant with your warmth, to suffocate this sorrow.
Raise your blanket to me; I promise not to cry;
Darken all the lamplight and let the night go by.
Copyright ©
softerware
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2015-07-26 22:48:04]
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Re: Safe Harbor
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 27th July 2015 @ 03:50:51 AM AEST
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| A sad state to be in but you penned it so well that I understated and empathise even though I don't agree. Very good write deep with emotion and well expressed |
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Re: Safe Harbor
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by JamesStockdale on
Monday, 27th July 2015 @ 09:32:24 AM AEST
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In my younger years I could not understand why people were willing to accept less than they deserved. With age comes reality. Some put their pride and integrity aside just to survive life. It's sad but a reality.
Great write indeed!
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Re: Safe Harbor
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by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 27th July 2015 @ 11:30:00 AM AEST
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This is a deviation from your usual posts...It feels much more personal. Candid.
Excellent. I love it.
~Scorp |
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Re: Safe Harbor
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 27th July 2015 @ 12:50:38 PM AEST
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I as well thought this was a deviation from your usual stuff but wow...wow. Excellent & intriguing.
Parts of it had me thinking of a magician too for some reason. :-O |
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Re: Safe Harbor
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by purplestary on
Tuesday, 28th July 2015 @ 12:49:05 AM AEST
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| There are times when I read something and am just completely dumbfounded by how lost I find myself by the end. Maybe it's how amazingly the writer seems to capture my exact feelings and emotions, or maybe it's something else. Whatever it is I'm not sure, but this write captivates me. I found myself at the end having to close my eyes and take a deep breath as the reality of it sank into my soul. How sad and yet so true every line you penned here is. It's as if you took it right out of my very soul. I'm pretty sure I whispered the word, "finally" when I finished reading this...thank you for writing this. The title you gave was absolutely briliant as well. |
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Re: Safe Harbor
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by speedy on
Tuesday, 28th July 2015 @ 04:21:39 PM AEST
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Great write.
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Re: Safe Harbor
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 1st August 2015 @ 02:09:10 AM AEST
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| Nothing breaks down our walls of pride, more than loneliness. Lies are so much more compassionate than the truth. Who needs the truth, it strips us to the bone and casts us to the cold winds. I've read this half a dozen times already, and it speaks so clearly to me. We need the deceit of such nights, the morning is hard enough. |
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Re: Safe Harbor
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by Invierno on
Sunday, 2nd August 2015 @ 04:33:39 PM AEST
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This is beautiful, honest and courageous. I've felt as you so eloquently describe, and it ain't no fun.
"Let me hide for just tonight; Cloak me in your schemes;
Weave a web so thick with lies, it muffles out the screams."
Simply awesome. As usual, you impress the hell out of me.
Invierno
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Re: Safe Harbor
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Friday, 21st August 2015 @ 06:41:31 PM AEST
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I've always believe that one of the strengths of a great write is the ability to close out with a hard hitting line that stops you in your tracks.
"Darken all the lamplight and let the night go by"
did that for me.
I commend you on this.
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Re: Safe Harbor
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by Spike on
Friday, 6th January 2017 @ 06:07:58 PM AEST
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I/'/ll join the chorus of complimentary remarks from our fellow posters. Impressive in its raw admissions, and stylistically entrancing.
Let/'/s hope no-one picks it up for an air B&B advertisement... |
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