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The Long Dark
Contributed by
puppy_dog_eyes
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Saturday, 25th July 2015 @ 04:04:56 PM in AEST
Topic:
fantasy
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The cold time is upon us
When our furs will be coated with the frozen dust that falls from the sky
And the ground yields nothing but thorns and bones
We follow those that we hunt
The herd beasts that dwell on the edge of our world
Who clothe our backs and feed our elders and children alike
These are the times that the air around does not burn the skin or sting the eyes
The long dark , where the shimmering wind eats deep into the flesh
And the night draws demons among the shadows as faces of those passed mist the flames
Where our kin fall let the earth claim again
We will cover them in rock and leave them to sleep
Where the sharp tooth prowls and scours the land
We will follow in his soft,hunting footsteps
By the edge of the twisting grey water
Always listening to the voices of the deep forest
Until the sky wakes again
Painting the land with warm orange fire
And our darkened world hides from the incoming light
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Re: The Long Dark
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by softerware on
Sunday, 26th July 2015 @ 12:08:39 AM AEST
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It always amazes me how you can create for us something you have never experienced! Fantasy has to be believable, and you make it so!
Your vivid imaginings are your gift to readers, taking us places WE will never go-- except by your talented writings!
A well crafted tale, fully thought out, and cleverly described "where the sharp tooth prowls" indeed!
Glad I can read this in my cozy house, and not on the frozen tundra you delivered! softerware |
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Re: The Long Dark
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 26th July 2015 @ 07:45:35 AM AEST
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Uh, who are you again? 
This is just flat out awesome! I love the way you wrote it from his perspective.
Great stuff you've got here, Steve.
Tim |
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Re: The Long Dark
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by Archie on
Sunday, 26th July 2015 @ 02:29:20 PM AEST
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| This thoroughly surprised and impressed me. Where ever your inspiration is coming from keep delving deep because with words like these you will have my eyes (ears). |
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Re: The Long Dark
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by hauntedscorp on
Sunday, 26th July 2015 @ 07:34:09 PM AEST
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Good to see you posting again, Steve! You really put a lot of thought into this write; well done. I really enjoyed being immersed in another era.
Great imagery, and just a well-written piece.
~Scorp |
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Re: The Long Dark
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by ingeniusidiot on
Monday, 27th July 2015 @ 11:52:47 AM AEST
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Amazing piece you have here. I like the perspective you used. A very vivid picture you have painted. Keep up the great work and look forward to more.
Rich |
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Re: The Long Dark
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by speedy on
Monday, 27th July 2015 @ 08:18:59 PM AEST
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Wow. Great write.
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Re: The Long Dark
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by irisblue on
Monday, 27th July 2015 @ 09:41:34 PM AEST
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steve,
the imagery and vivid writing in this poem is striking. I felt like I was back in that era! real like feel to this story, love it. |
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Re: The Long Dark
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 28th July 2015 @ 04:16:36 PM AEST
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beautifully penned, an enchanting vivid write,
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: The Long Dark
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by Jenni_K on
Thursday, 13th August 2015 @ 08:02:25 PM AEST
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How could we forget such a talented poet and one with such beautiful eyes!! Nothing more for me to say except great write,, The others said it all!!!
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Re: The Long Dark
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by ming on
Monday, 23rd May 2016 @ 08:51:44 PM AEST
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This could be our future as well if you think about. Kind of scary stuff. Great emotional read.
ming |
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