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temporal realm
Contributed by
ladyfawn
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Sunday, 12th July 2015 @ 10:53:55 PM in AEST
Topic:
surreal
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he stood in the abandoned castle in the dark
looking out the windows as he heard the lark
sat there in the ancient castle on hill of high
dog lay at his feet as he gave most heavy sigh,
he slowly leaned back his eyes closed in sleep
of another time another place- into dreams deep
walls of ruin held secrets from days long gone
dreaming of blackbirds- heard a girl in her song,
she sang- as the notes carried a desolate tune
she became a nightbird and flew to the moon
the chair leaned back and crashed to the floor
eyes opened in alarm- this same castle no more,
yet wait- though the walls were the same style
fire in the hearth had been burning for a while
oh- what magic was this swirling around his head
he yelled and stomped a foot to see was he dead.
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Re: temporal realm
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by ingeniusidiot on
Monday, 13th July 2015 @ 08:55:44 AM AEST
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Interesting piece. yet another good write. Im getting to really enjoy reading your work.
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Re: temporal realm
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by JamesStockdale on
Monday, 13th July 2015 @ 10:10:25 AM AEST
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Beautiful!
My kind of poem.
For a moment there I was really there.
Spectacular.
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Re: temporal realm
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by Beyfoxman5 on
Monday, 13th July 2015 @ 10:31:12 AM AEST
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A great painting, powerful. I was right in that place as I read it.
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Re: temporal realm
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by Jenni_K on
Monday, 13th July 2015 @ 02:38:23 PM AEST
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Once again, my dear friend, you have painted such a vivid picture with your words... Thanks for sharing on FB... Hugs and woofies...
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Re: temporal realm
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by irisblue on
Monday, 13th July 2015 @ 08:09:18 PM AEST
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| intriguing and magical I love this! |
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Re: temporal realm
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by speedy on
Monday, 13th July 2015 @ 08:53:24 PM AEST
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Great write.
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Re: temporal realm
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by joydeep_nath on
Tuesday, 14th July 2015 @ 12:59:21 PM AEST
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| nice intriguing write.. |
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Re: temporal realm
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by xHeathenx on
Tuesday, 14th July 2015 @ 04:50:41 PM AEST
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Nicely done Nessa. :)
The picture here and how it is portrayed is terrifically done.
i often don't use words of single syllables to end my lines because I feel I can't properly convey my message, but what I like about your writing, especially here, is that the picture placed within the poem is nothing short of vivid, lively, and intense.
All the best,
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Re: temporal realm
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by hauntedscorp on
Thursday, 16th July 2015 @ 12:15:13 PM AEST
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I love this new chapter in your writing...Exquisite! Reading this poem I am so intrigued to explore more about this mysterious man and all that haunts him.
~Scorp |
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Re: temporal realm
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by Invierno on
Friday, 17th July 2015 @ 07:24:09 PM AEST
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So very nice to read you again. I've missed coming on here, and you are a primary reason.
My best to you,
Invierno |
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Re: temporal realm
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 18th July 2015 @ 02:19:18 PM AEST
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The castle may have been a ruin, but he wasn't dead. He still hears that blackbird, and her song. Beautiful, truly. x
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Re: temporal realm
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by Lydthon15 on
Sunday, 19th July 2015 @ 09:00:19 PM AEST
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| The imagery in this poem is amazing. It gives you this otherworldly feeling.Great write. |
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Re: temporal realm
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Saturday, 25th July 2015 @ 04:37:44 PM AEST
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Yet again I was drawn in to the mesmerising imagery that is always a feature of your poetry.
Yet again I was not disappointed to read the words and imagine the scene that you have so skillfully created
Gave me a sense of inner peace reading this
Great work
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Re: temporal realm
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by Archie on
Wednesday, 29th July 2015 @ 03:34:26 AM AEST
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This gives me ideas for my own story (Romero's Quest). You have a great imagination and a very pleasing style.
I am writing a story, a history of a people. I had taken a break from it but your write has sparked inspiration. |
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