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Failed Fairy Tales by m.n.i.w
Contributed by
mniw
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Sunday, 5th April 2015 @ 01:32:56 PM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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I found tragedy in my happy ending. Fairy tales failed to tell the truth about the harsh endings pending. A beautiful pain like when the sun shines and it rains. An ugly contradiction. I use to believe in fiction. And a dream is a depiction. Now I'm praying, hoping, and wishing that my ending could be different. But I'm a coffin in a grave and I've been let down. Bury me in the dirt. And stain my soul. Along with all the lies I was sold. And along with the one that I bought for truth. Can never accept the negligence of evidence. I need proof. Hoping to believe or believing in hope. Elements that give life to dreams. But fully living out dreams in the end is a joke.
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Re: Failed Fairy Tales by m.n.i.w
(User Rating: 1 ) by Waynster on
Sunday, 5th April 2015 @ 04:09:30 PM AEST (User
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If I could make a comment in corrective criticism, have you ever thought about a style or form to put your poem in, when posting? As you posted it, it is one big paragraph or glob of words and creates and emotion within a reader to not want to read or for it to be enjoyable to read. What you want is your poem to be in a form or style that flows and is easy to read. You want to pull in a reader, make them feel what you're writing and make them say wow! What I have said is only my true feelings about it, I mean no disrespect to you.
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