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Spirit
Contributed by
blossomwriter
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Sunday, 5th April 2015 @ 01:45:16 AM in AEST
Topic:
spiritual
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The seasons change and time dies go by,
but your heart is never gone;
you did not die.
Your spirit reigns over a thousand rivers.
You're the warmth when the darkness shivers.
You are the sovereign winds glorifying the skies.
You are the starlit tears in a million eyes.
Soft moons who echo on a treetop canopy,
the shelter who guards the peasant vanity.
Seeds who spread their naturedly winds that fly,
my heart who echoes in the midnight sky.
Through the lilacs and honeysuckles a tender bliss,
you are the spirit, when I think of this.
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blossomwriter
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2015-04-05 01:45:16]
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Re: Spirit
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 5th April 2015 @ 04:51:20 AM AEST
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I realize that a lot of people say spelling doesn't matter but I disagree because if you misspell a word or use a word that does not have a specific meaning specific to the content, it distracts the reader and trips up the flow. The person has to stop and, like this morning, say to self, "what the heck does that mean?"
Took me a little bit to realize you may have intended the word dies to actually be does. ---> The seasons change and time dies go by
Other than that, very lovely poem. Thank you for sharing and  to YPDC.
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Re: Spirit
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by Beyfoxman5 on
Sunday, 5th April 2015 @ 11:15:49 AM AEST
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I don't know if truer words have ever been read by me. Nice work, and welcome.
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Re: Spirit
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 5th April 2015 @ 02:33:41 PM AEST
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warm welcome to ypdc, this is absolutely beautiful!
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Spirit
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by Waynster on
Sunday, 5th April 2015 @ 04:04:33 PM AEST
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As Tim has posted, spelling does matter. Perhaps grammar not as much, but spelling is a must! However in your case, the I and O are right next to each other on the keyboard, so this is merely a case of not editing your work before posting it. I always read my stuff twice before posting. I have made mistakes, guilty for it, but I try hard to edit and find and fix any mistakes. I am hard on myself about spelling words correctly too! This was a very good poem though, thanks for sharing it.
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Re: Spirit
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by Waynster on
Sunday, 5th April 2015 @ 04:19:37 PM AEST
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Back again, in fact, when you type a word wrong or correct, but wrong place in a sentence, you are usually reminded by a red or blue squiggly line at the bottom of the word. If you then take the mouse and right click on that line, you will be given the option to choose the correct spelling of the word.
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Re: Spirit
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by irisblue on
Sunday, 5th April 2015 @ 10:37:46 PM AEST
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| very lovely. |
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Re: Spirit
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by xHeathenx on
Monday, 6th April 2015 @ 03:33:57 AM AEST
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| Wow very nice. Liking the imagery here. Carries the eyes of the mind to a number of places and shows them a great set of sights. Welcome to YPDC. :) |
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Re: Spirit
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by shadowdancer on
Friday, 10th April 2015 @ 01:45:38 AM AEST
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Welcome to ypdc, beautiful.
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