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ARIEL'S TOOTHBRUSH
Contributed by
alicewhite
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Friday, 20th February 2015 @ 12:21:49 PM in AEST
Topic:
dedicatedpoems
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THE WORLD CARD 21 IN A GRAIN OF SAND
"I could never write a poem about a toothbrush"
although now in this lifetime I feel that I must
lest these once white teen teeth
start to crumble and crown to rust
enamel be it hardened by life's thistle's n bristle's
brush stokes holding sway the stench of cavities cankerous decay
soft substance inside I am liquid nerves dead to the bone and dry
accepting every knock welcoming the after shock
fervently holding firm and rooted to the spot
with tooth and nail i venture a denture to quench my thirst for adventure
time stands still
on the Indrid Cold line
and I turn to dust
alchemical gold
forever mine
We will see you again
i will see you in time.
Copyright ©
alicewhite
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2015-02-20 12:21:49]
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Re: ARIEL'S TOOTHBRUSH
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 21st February 2015 @ 11:50:43 PM AEST
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hate to say pure genius because it's overused, but this is pure genius and not just because you quoted Plath or Blake but because of the etching away of enamel over time which is beautifully depicted here in this very interesting poem.
long may you run/ we've been through things together/ with trunks of things still to come/ We found things to do in stormy weather/ long may your run/ with your chrome heart shining in the sun/ long may you run --- from old Neil Young.
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Re: ARIEL'S TOOTHBRUSH
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by JamesStockdale on
Sunday, 22nd February 2015 @ 09:15:28 AM AEST
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Well you pulled it off.
So well I'm going to brush my teeth once again.
I did give me anxiety and that proves this was a powerful poem.
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Re: ARIEL'S TOOTHBRUSH
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by ming on
Wednesday, 9th September 2015 @ 01:43:26 AM AEST
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Your mind is a wonderland. 'start to crumble and crown to rust' one of my fav lines.
ming |
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