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break free
Contributed by
FireStarter
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Friday, 13th February 2015 @ 08:25:35 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Trapped in a cage
Can't wait to get out and end this pain
They keep me in here for over an hour
If I try to break free they'll show their power
I wait and wait without water and food
I try so hard not to show my 'tude
These people won't get my feelings straight
They'll break my spirit to slow my gait
Finally someone opens the door
I run like hell, and then some more
I'll never go back to the cage I was in
For if I did that i'll never forgive...myself
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Re: break free
(User Rating: 1 ) by xHeathenx on
Saturday, 14th February 2015 @ 07:38:33 AM AEST (User
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Dark, but with a touch of inspiration and wisdom.
Almost a fool me twice, shame on me sort of thing.
I like the nature of the poem though.
The liberation and the rebellion are a much needed part of life.
If only I can get myself to do the same in REAL life.
Something about this reminded me of a poem I wrote years ago, back when I was in high school, that I uploaded here back in 2010, admittedly a few years after.
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Re: break free
(User Rating: 1 ) by Kimmy79 on
Saturday, 14th February 2015 @ 10:53:57 AM AEST (User
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The feelings of a caged animal..I liked this. |
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Re: break free
(User Rating: 1 ) by Waynster on
Saturday, 14th February 2015 @ 03:18:17 PM AEST (User
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Very good write! it reminds me of a poem I wrote called Breaking The Chains! Thanks for sharing your poem!
Wayne |
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Re: break free
(User Rating: 1 ) by Jigget on
Sunday, 15th February 2015 @ 08:45:22 PM AEST (User
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i'm glad this is a 'remain free' rather than a 'wish i were free' poem.
on a side note, a friend one time compared the Eagle's song 'Hotel California' to doing a stint in the joint. this poem made me think of that...
a good write. seems like you could add verses to this one for a long time coming.
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