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Ghost Story
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Sunday, 1st February 2015 @ 12:05:25 PM in AEST
Topic:
goodbyepoetry
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The suspense is killing me
Sacred lies are running free
Cheap thrills next to nil,
Death cries sounding shrill.
Hand me a pill-
A forget-me-not,
A different script, with a better plot,
Anything's preferred to what I've got.
Foolish to hope for something more,
You're top shelf, I'm just the floor,
You step on-
Wipe your muddy tracks upon,
It was always leading to this,
Never to a kiss, let's dismiss,
The absurd notion
Of some love potion-
You were never mine to grasp.
An extraordinary lapse
In judgement, running rampant,
I was present, you were absent.
Copyright ©
hauntedscorp
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2015-02-01 12:05:25]
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Re: Ghost Story
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 1st February 2015 @ 01:04:12 PM AEST
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| Lame? I don't think so. It is actually very powerful. It just drips with a sad reflection and resignation. Quite a contrast to your recent posts. Ghost story? Yes, it is haunting in a sad but oh, so memorable way. |
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Re: Ghost Story
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Sunday, 1st February 2015 @ 02:11:55 PM AEST
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I don't recall ever reading anything you've ever written that could be considered lame.
Perhaps we are our own worst critic sometimes?
Steve |
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Re: Ghost Story
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by deadheadpoet on
Sunday, 1st February 2015 @ 06:36:14 PM AEST
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| Holy*****e. This hits me to the bone. Lame? I think not. If so then I am one lame soul to have felt this so strongly. Great write. |
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Re: Ghost Story
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 1st February 2015 @ 11:45:10 PM AEST
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I'd like to chime in on the "horrifically lame" too. I submit this:
This is one of them poems that I can oh so relate to aaaand, wish I had written because I have felt like this many a time. So, if it
is indeed "horrifically lame", then (like Laura said) I'm lame too.
I think the muse is still there and I was about to choose my favorite stanza but then decided, nope, it's all my favorite which equals great. Hell, look at the reads alone. People love your poetry and so do I.
Guess it's back to the ol' fishing drawing board. ;-) |
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Re: Ghost Story
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by Invierno on
Monday, 2nd February 2015 @ 04:47:55 PM AEST
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Dude, you have lost NOTHING. You had me ROTFLMAO whatever the hell that is..I hope I got it right.
"Hand me a pill-
A forget-me-not,
A different script, with a better plot,
Anything's preferred to what I've got."
Brilliant. Our muse can war gossamer or sackcloth.
Invierno |
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Re: Ghost Story
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by Invierno on
Monday, 2nd February 2015 @ 04:49:41 PM AEST
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| 'wear' not 'war' (or that MAY apply, depending.....) |
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Re: Ghost Story
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 16th February 2015 @ 09:54:13 AM AEST
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bs. about the muse, i don't believe that for one second,
it is good to sit on seats edge and be aware, excellent
writing,
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Ghost Story
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by unknown_utopia on
Sunday, 21st June 2015 @ 12:37:43 AM AEST
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Never could this flow be lame
absurd is that notion,
Thanx for sharing. |
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