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Until We Are Dust
Contributed by
puppy_dog_eyes
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Friday, 30th January 2015 @ 01:42:49 PM in AEST
Topic:
fantasy
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I am Ayardal of the Northlands
My kin the people of the low mountains
Riders of the west wind
Keepers of the mist
Where the rain smashes the cliffs and shadows coat the Winter sky
Darkened eyes scour the scarred valley
Sentinels against meagre moon
This timewashed stronghold moulds deep tomb for brittle lives
By the twist of ancient water children beat defiant drum
As light cracked heavens throw vengeant spears onto the land
Bleak landscape echoes with the voice of our forefathers
Brethren who lay sleeping in sacred rock catacombs
We paint our lives across this barren, unforgiving canvas
This theatre of war daubed with the blood of countless enemies
Each day will erode us, weaken our bodies like a sip of slow poison
All mortal, we passage from vibrant youth to inevitable decay
Every sunset drawing out vitality, soul and spirit
Until we are dust.
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Re: Until We Are Dust
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by alicewhite on
Friday, 30th January 2015 @ 04:35:26 PM AEST
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| puppy dog eyes , you have my attention but is that yours or my intention, either way this poem has my goat and upon silver lake your words here keep me afloat, love it , in the words of pennywise the clown , "We all flat down here". x |
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Re: Until We Are Dust
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by softerware on
Sunday, 1st February 2015 @ 01:11:10 AM AEST
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Your words are colorful even as you seek to describe the drab and mundane. Like a full orchestra playing in the rain, you cannot hide the beauty of the language you choose to play your symphony. May you play until we are dust.
Really lovely.
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Re: Until We Are Dust
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by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 2nd February 2015 @ 09:26:53 AM AEST
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Vivid descriptors you painted! The ending is morose but effective.
Nicely done.
~Scorp |
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Re: Until We Are Dust
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by alicewhite on
Friday, 6th February 2015 @ 05:25:31 PM AEST
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lol, I meant float,
Ive dug a hole so deep that I float
we all float down here xxx |
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Re: Until We Are Dust
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by alicewhite on
Friday, 6th February 2015 @ 05:32:14 PM AEST
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Run rabbit run
dig that hole
forget the sun
and when at last the work is done
don't sit down
its time to dig another one
Breathe lyrics
Breathe, breathe in the air.
Don't be afraid to care.
Leave but don't leave me.
Look around and choose your own ground.
Long you live and high you fly
And smiles you'll give and tears you'll cry
And all you touch and all you see
Is all your life will ever be.
Run, rabbit run.
Dig that hole, forget the sun,
And when at last the work is done
Don't sit down it's time to dig another one.
For long you live and high you fly
But only if you ride the tide
And balanced on the biggest wave
You race towards an early grave.
pink Floyd dark side of the moon |
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Re: Until We Are Dust
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 17th February 2015 @ 08:25:17 AM AEST
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this certainly made me think of ancient people, vikings
came to mind, a brilliant write,
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Until We Are Dust
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by blossomwriter on
Thursday, 9th April 2015 @ 09:52:21 PM AEST
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| This was absolutely powerful with it imagery, love the whole Brave heart theme behind it, you killed it, I have always loved the movie and the descriptive imagery took me to that same place, the concluding line was just right for the poems entirety, the message delivered with such penned passion. I loved it! |
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