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Onion
Contributed by
deadheadpoet
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Thursday, 29th January 2015 @ 11:19:32 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Sometimes one just feels
like they're in a vegetative
state of mind.
An onion if you will,
aged...
lying at the bottom of the bin.
My outside feeling dry
and rough.
The skin darkened and flaking off
but underneath
there are layers and layers
that exist.
Unpeel me if you dare...
If you can bear
the burning
the biting
that my inner core
reveals.
Copyright ©
deadheadpoet
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2015-01-29 11:19:32]
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Re: Onion
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by Invierno on
Thursday, 29th January 2015 @ 04:58:22 PM AEST
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I get it. Well done. We are a strange species....we always feel so inadequate, when we are quite unique and wonderful, which I am sure you are, else you would not have penned such a piece of art.
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Re: Onion
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by shelby on
Thursday, 29th January 2015 @ 09:15:48 PM AEST
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Intense well done!
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Re: Onion
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 5th February 2015 @ 09:40:47 PM AEST
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I like that you chose an onion. You could have chose any vegetable for your metaphor but if you unpeel an onion, it can bring tears to your eyes. If someone was listening to the onion after unpeeling it, one could also cry after learning what has been revealed from said onion.
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