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2 a.m. Thoughts
Contributed by
deadheadpoet
on
Thursday, 22nd January 2015 @ 07:00:33 PM in AEST
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So cold inside
Try to hide it
Keep that defroster on
Don't want faint portraits
Mudding the way
No...we can't have that
Turn the frown around
they all say
And ONE does
until no ONE is looking
The warmth and the
palm trees on their
fake beaches fade.
I turn away
and brush off the snow.
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deadheadpoet
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2015-01-22 19:00:33]
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Re: 2 a.m. Thoughts
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by JamesStockdale on
Thursday, 22nd January 2015 @ 10:10:18 PM AEST
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Winter blues
Nice!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
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Re: 2 a.m. Thoughts
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by Jeriku on
Friday, 23rd January 2015 @ 01:52:34 AM AEST
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| The dealings of puttin up for others. Or at least I take. Interesting complex yet simple c |
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Re: 2 a.m. Thoughts
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 24th January 2015 @ 10:50:51 PM AEST
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Iiiiii 'mmm shaking with cold as I read this
well d'ddd'dd'one
you know the defroster don't cut it
you start to see things late at night
as they aren't
cause it don't work just right
And maybe, just maybe, that's a good
thing / snow is like a blanket
and there's no more windshield fluid
left
in the tropics I guess
this one is great!
Peace! |
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Re: 2 a.m. Thoughts
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by hauntedscorp on
Sunday, 8th February 2015 @ 09:35:06 AM AEST
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Don't want faint portraits
Mudding the way
No...we can't have that.
I feel like I could write some sort of War and Peace-sized essay just on those 3 lines alone...I mean, wow!!!
Then you bowled me over with that sharp ending.
This is a great piece, very emotive, and well-written.
~Scorp |
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