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Watching The World Revolve
Contributed by
waynster
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Tuesday, 20th January 2015 @ 03:15:09 PM in AEST
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Today the world revolved around me
as I sat there in my car very still
I was just having a moment
no, I was not feeling ill
Sitting in a parking lot
on the border at Travel Free
I just sat there and watched so many people
not one even noticed me
Alcohol and cigarettes
the biggest commodity everyone seemed to buy
I just sat there in my car for 20 minutes watching
over and over asking myself why
Smoking is so unhealthy
but people continue to do it still
Even when they know it can make them very sick
or eventually them it will kill
The looks on their faces
like a kid in a candy store
Some spending their last money
when there are other things they need so much more
Those few moments
I sat still and watched the world revolve
I come to realize
everyone has problems in this life to resolve
I am happy I am not a smoker
alcohol is my dearest friend no longer
As I sat there in my car watching
I realized over time, I have become much stronger
So I had a moment
as I love to watch people and how they act
I don’t place myself as any better than them
I just have stronger will power; that is a fact
Written on 20 January 2015
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Re: Watching The World Revolve
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by JamesStockdale on
Tuesday, 20th January 2015 @ 09:56:12 PM AEST
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I did the same the other day.
People of all ages early in the morning the liquor store was the busiest store in the center.
And most walk ins were female under 35.
Well done and I can feel your vision!!!!!!!!
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Re: Watching The World Revolve
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by kmec1990 on
Wednesday, 21st January 2015 @ 10:46:26 PM AEST
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Congratulations on that will power! if my dad had possessed the same he might have never had to fight and lose the battle with lung cancer. sad but true.
Excellent write even if it was a bit emotional for me personally
Cheers
K |
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Re: Watching The World Revolve
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by hauntedscorp on
Sunday, 25th January 2015 @ 12:06:20 PM AEST
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Cigarettes are disgusting. I can't understand that addiction at all, but hey, some people can't understand my addictions either. I like the overall message in this piece, the 7th stanza being the strongest (or most relatable) to me. Not sure how I feel about the ending though. It kind of contradicts itself and is a little smug. I suppose to me, it resembles the general lack of compassion most struggling people are met with when they try to seek help.
An enjoyable read nonetheless, and something to ponder, which is a plus in itself.
~Scorp |
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