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Crown Jewel
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Tuesday, 6th January 2015 @ 11:27:24 PM in AEST
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With a blast of your arctic indifference
I am left frozen in your resolve.
Kindred; romanticizing ambivalence,
A crime of passion I can't absolve
Icy to the touch, yet readily dissolves
Melting, shadow of a man you are,
Dribbling, snivelling, unappreciative wretch-
With hand outstretched, deep into the jar
If caught you whistle for a loyal dog to fetch
Sketchy in your attempts to redeem yourself,
Crystalline lies have hardened their shell,
Biding opportune chance to consume itself
Complacent in your eternal hell.
Darkened corner, where your pride still dwells,
Comatose pulse to your own demise.
Summon from its slumber in high stakes war,
You're a toothy wolf in sheep's disguise.
Greedily seeking, always demanding more
Steadily giving less, like an unpaid whore
A puddle of resistance- you fool.
I said; Sit. Stay, *****. It is you on all fours,
Attempting to barter your crown jewel.
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Re: Crown Jewel
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 7th January 2015 @ 12:02:59 AM AEST
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I know you like poetry that is written from the heart and this seems it is written from the heart....a heart that has been broken too many times and now you're ready to hit back with attitude....perhaps Scorpitude!!!!
I said, Sit. Stay, *****. (Scorpitude!!!) This poem drips from first word to Scorpitude last with the signature attitude that is you!
I am very TIMpressed!
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Re: Crown Jewel
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 7th January 2015 @ 04:05:14 AM AEST
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| Given the title, I wasn't expecting that. But the ballsy, have-some-of -that lines are stitched together with the hand of a master pensmith. The irony; you have bestowed your flaming passion upon the subject. |
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Re: Crown Jewel
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by kmec1990 on
Wednesday, 7th January 2015 @ 01:30:06 PM AEST
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Beautifully stated! Your distain is magnificent and I would almost pity the fool, if he didn't sound like such a tool. When you bite, you bite hard! Yet another masterpiece.
K |
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Re: Crown Jewel
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Saturday, 10th January 2015 @ 01:21:06 AM AEST
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| Reading this aloud has a hauntingly satisfying feeling. loved every line. hope to see you here soon |
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Re: Crown Jewel
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by sanders on
Wednesday, 14th January 2015 @ 10:22:17 PM AEST
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Scorp you're unparalleled in what you do...
such magnificent write...:) |
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Re: Crown Jewel
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 18th January 2015 @ 11:11:18 PM AEST
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happy new year to you too! this write is brilliant and
biting, beautiful job!
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Crown Jewel
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by xHeathenx on
Wednesday, 25th February 2015 @ 04:46:25 PM AEST
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| Damn! This poem here is dark, tense, bitter-sweet, giving me a smile as I read I like a treat at the dark magician's spectacular performance. Seriously, the tone and writing style seems to have an abstract layer to it, and the last two stanzas were frighteningly good. I wonder who be the metaphoric wretch of which is spoken, in influence and in your own imagination. Either way, the dominance of the crown does not trump the dominance of might. :) |
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Re: Crown Jewel
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by deusdeira on
Thursday, 23rd April 2015 @ 04:21:59 AM AEST
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| "darkened corner where your pride still dwells" lol that made me laugh. well done. |
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Re: Crown Jewel
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by deusdeira on
Thursday, 23rd April 2015 @ 04:22:04 AM AEST
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| "darkened corner where your pride still dwells" lol that made me laugh. well done. |
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