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Desires and Vengeance
Contributed by
deadreckoning1983
on
Friday, 19th December 2014 @ 05:26:08 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Wake up
Pistol whip myself for good measure.
Without waking I know what it will be,
A deluge of despondence,
Random chaos raining down.
My life boat is overwhelmed,
A tiny vessel caught.
Her vengeance is an ocean
And it's seeping in on me.
Soaking me raw with regrets of forgotten promises.
I can't, I just can't.
Horizon and ocean meet, inseparable,
They are twins, eternal.
Sailing forever onward into the vast emptiness.
The two cannot coexist,
Loving one and hating the other.
Some days I don't know which is who
I want to be the subject of her ink.
Desires, black and white.
Copyright ©
deadreckoning1983
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2014-12-19 05:26:08]
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Re: Desires and Vengeance
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by Invierno on
Friday, 19th December 2014 @ 06:58:19 AM AEST
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A powerful and evocative poem. It makes me sad and a little ill, mainly because I can commiserate so very well to this write.
You have a Spanish Inquisitor working over-time on your heart. The irony is that you are fitting the bill.
Fire that bastido! We are of a mind, you and I; we who ever tread in the guilty waters of ourselves. DR, you HAVE to be a super cool person- no one could write as you and be anything but. Lay that sack of rocks down.
Invierno |
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Re: Desires and Vengeance
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by hauntedscorp on
Friday, 19th December 2014 @ 10:52:10 AM AEST
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It sounds like you and I both wake up on the sunny side of the street... ;) Obviously I relate to this confusion of feelings quite a bit. This is rather excellent. Strong descriptors with depth of emotion. My eyes keep darting back to that freaking awesome and utterly smirk-inducing second line. Haha! I absolutely love it, and I am starting to think that might be what is missing from my morning routine. Lol.
Ooh, sarcasm, you sexy naughty beast!!!
Good to see you back.
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Re: Desires and Vengeance
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 19th December 2014 @ 01:18:37 PM AEST
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If those first two lines don't light a spark in the reader, nothing will. I'm gonna remember the next time I pistol whip myself, and remember where I read it.
' My lifeboat is overwhelmed,
A tiny vessel caught.
Her vengeance is an ocean
And it's seeping in on me'
Great metaphor, I'm gonna remember that too. In fact, the whole poem is pretty, damn good. |
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Re: Desires and Vengeance
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by shelby on
Sunday, 21st December 2014 @ 02:50:06 AM AEST
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MIrror the comments of everyone.Deep,powerful.I relate.Super work here
Michelle |
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Re: Desires and Vengeance
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 29th December 2014 @ 08:03:58 PM AEST
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absolutely blown away by this! just- wow!
hugs n' love nessa |
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