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Sweet Dreams
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Friday, 28th November 2014 @ 06:28:15 PM in AEST
Topic:
LoveRemembered
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A tantalizing glimpse of your essence,
Escaped cultivation last night
Took flights of fancy, but none the carefree
What would you have this be? Construed-
Screwed. Lewd, and obtuse. Abandoned refuse
Our dead end labyrinth, paradigm
Full moon, in bloom, he offered remedy
Craving touch, alive with passion-
Melody distorted by distant flute
Out of reach, unattainable,
With curious wings I visit this muse
Who loves passionate in my dreams-
Drastic measures, but no time for remorse
Utterly fantastic. Blasted.
Ooh, baby, you are an endless resource-
Climaxing from your timeless verse.
Copyright ©
hauntedscorp
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2014-11-28 18:28:15]
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Re: Sweet Dreams
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 28th November 2014 @ 06:51:59 PM AEST
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Beautifully and passionately written, but love remembered is often best left that way. If it wasn't remembered...it would still be. Death alone, is the reaper of true love. Sorry, I'm getting all romantic and morbid.
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Re: Sweet Dreams
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by lesoleilnoire on
Friday, 28th November 2014 @ 07:19:55 PM AEST
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This poem is quite romantic and it teases the reader. It feels like it represents the passionate stage of love before the full physical interaction takes place. This in a way is the best time or memory of a relationship before anything happens--anything can happen in the mind. Great poem!
Heidi
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Re: Sweet Dreams
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Friday, 28th November 2014 @ 11:15:04 PM AEST
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Drastic measures, but no time for remorse
Utterly fantastic. Blasted.
Ooh, baby, you are an endless resource-
Climaxing from your timeless verse.
I love when the muse comes and takes over me, when she destroys paradigms and gives pleasure over pleasure in the lexicon of love. Words have so much meaning and weight and yet many of us are ill equipped or poorly prepared to wield them. They cut, they heal, tantalize, destroy, encourage. how little we understand what we say |
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Re: Sweet Dreams
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 29th November 2014 @ 03:08:17 AM AEST
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Love in dreams can be the best, after all, because no one gets hurt and you wake up and they're already gone! Uh, yeah, well that last part can happen in real life too but then it wasn't love. I ramble, as usual.
I love the way you'll insert a word alone with emphasis. It really puts feeling into your writes.
That last line, in my not so humble opinion, is oh so cool. That and the line before it actually made me think of a poet who cannot stop writing great poems. Hmmm, that could be you!
And finally, you used the word obtuse in a poem. Like shenanigans, it's on my list of favorite words, or well, it would be if I actually had a list. |
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Re: Sweet Dreams
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 29th November 2014 @ 10:09:22 AM AEST
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a really romantic sexy write, dreams are wonderful:)
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Sweet Dreams
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by unknown_utopia on
Saturday, 29th November 2014 @ 10:11:24 PM AEST
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On fire with Desire
yes yes |
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Re: Sweet Dreams
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by Archie on
Monday, 24th August 2015 @ 01:38:36 AM AEST
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Classy but dangerous I think I like it, but it may draw questions from the little ones.
You truly know how to use imagery |
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