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I Unpacked Myself These Last Few Years
Contributed by
Invierno
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Friday, 21st November 2014 @ 04:46:57 PM in AEST
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Lifepoems
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I unpacked myself these last years,
removing packages wrapped in feeling felt,
others barbed twine better kept at bay-
today (not really, but I'll say) is it-
but no one room can hold them;
pull here, tug there, this one needs a rip-
no mind all at once can pay them mind,
(all at once)
'ere them trouncing hard upon
the naive enough to tear the wrap,
or beaten enough to face the music.
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Invierno
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2014-11-21 16:46:57]
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Re: I Unpacked Myself These Last Few Years
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 21st November 2014 @ 10:06:30 PM AEST
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wow... all these things
"no mind all at once can pay them mind
all at once..."
Invierno, you sort of wonder
about looking at things torn apart
like a prism here
I like this bit here.
There is all these clouds
and caught in between them
a filtered stream of light
let's say a brilliant rainbow
It reminds me of the building where I work
It's very open and I have a stand up desk
that sits directly in front of windows more
than thirty feet high
And the cavernous room changes
And all the things look different depending
on how the light hits the room
Like your outside where you really
would like to be.
I think I understand your concept
I could be wrong, but
but facing the music is to me
the coolest, wildest, most
truest way to one day feel
all the beauty there is.
This is a good track... you should
expand on it more from time to time
Best always!
Peace! |
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Re: I Unpacked Myself These Last Few Years
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Saturday, 22nd November 2014 @ 01:00:05 AM AEST
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| excellent word play my friend. I know how you feel. its like becoming a person requires us to pull away those boxes of delusion and presuppositions. very good write here. i love a good look into the self. |
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Re: I Unpacked Myself These Last Few Years
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by Beyfoxman5 on
Saturday, 22nd November 2014 @ 08:57:12 AM AEST
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Excellent stuff. Sacrificing who you are for who you are going to be. Thank you for sharing.
Best,
Fox |
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Re: I Unpacked Myself These Last Few Years
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 22nd November 2014 @ 11:42:53 AM AEST
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interesting poem, it is either too simple or far beyond me,
these things that blow one's mind.........
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: I Unpacked Myself These Last Few Years
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by RussellReinhardt on
Monday, 24th November 2014 @ 11:15:07 PM AEST
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Hello there boet
Yes this is a difficult path in life. We never want to give up what is ours. Be it good or bad. That's why most people in fact 99,9% of us have baggage. It's mine al mine I tell you and I won't give it up. That's how we see it. Then comes a day when we grow a pare of balls and once again we all get there some day. Then this process that your at starts. The unpacking and discarding of unwanted goods. Found in the closets of the heart and mind the sheds of the sole. Its not an easy path my friend but its very necessary. Some start unpacking and sifting and others just toss everything away. Which ever you chose. Good on you my friend you will feel better and rest well from here on in. This is a great write and very good expression of emotion and raw honesty. God bless.
Greetings
Rus |
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Re: I Unpacked Myself These Last Few Years
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 25th November 2014 @ 08:19:02 AM AEST
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I like the concept of unpacking and unwrapping. You wrote this just abstract enough for the reader to enjoy unwrapping the mystery in your words.
Good stuff.
~Scorp |
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