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Mayhap You Might Impale Me?
Contributed by
Invierno
on
Thursday, 13th November 2014 @ 06:38:24 PM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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A journey sings within, you see.
Maybe the Carpathian Mountains-
home to Dra-kuh-lah- Vlad?
Mayhap you might impale me?
To feel, even once, the pain of
agony; no more for me
the comfort of
the bar fight diffused,
the argument averted,
the wolf that ran on the banging tin.
I grow weary of safety and
long for the rage within to vent,
to be be spent on the shore-
ceaseless waves pounding in fury
on rocks that don't care
and fare no worse for it.
A bruised eye or cut lip-
why not?
Is there some grand achievement
to run one's course
and pompously claim
all was gained
through civil discourse-
none taken or granted by
human ragged force?
No blood spatters
no shirt in tatters-
how very boring, of course.
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Invierno
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Re: Mayhap You Might Impale Me?
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Thursday, 13th November 2014 @ 11:30:15 PM AEST
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YES, let that sh1t out! Listless and longing is a hard place to be brother.
No blood spatters
no shirt in tatters-
how very boring, of course.
No risk no reward? I am proud of you and this write is one of the reasons why. you are amazing! |
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Re: Mayhap You Might Impale Me?
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 14th November 2014 @ 11:04:31 AM AEST
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sounds like your looking for a fight lol, needing some action and adventure
to be sure, perhaps in a bit of a rut tho it sure makes your poem shine,
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Mayhap You Might Impale Me?
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by RussellReinhardt on
Friday, 14th November 2014 @ 11:13:10 PM AEST
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Hello there Boet
I feel asleep with my phone in hand. Reading this poem last night, by no uncertain terms am I saying this poem is boring, on the contrary I had to read it a few times before I comment. One needs to tread lightly when commenting on a piece of this magnitude. There is a very deep underlying message here. I'm no Doc, but I have been round the block a few time.
What I'm gonna say now is not an instruction to go out and become this wild caveman. Neither am I blaming the ladies for what we have become.
We men are hunters, providers, and warriors. That is our nature. Now comes this new age society that we live in and tells us to be as meek as a lamb. Ja right. Yes in to days world we do need to be more gentle creatures however we need to find a balance or we will go insane. Every man has this wild side and we suppress it every day, and thats a good thing one would say. Find your release valve my friend and live life beautifully. God bless.
Greetings
Rus |
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Re: Mayhap You Might Impale Me?
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by unknown_utopia on
Sunday, 16th November 2014 @ 10:54:30 PM AEST
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I feel you
playing the game gets stale after awhile
gotta get that rage back.....
thanx for sharing.
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Re: Mayhap You Might Impale Me?
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by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 17th November 2014 @ 11:53:14 AM AEST
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Excellent biting flow and well-written. Great use of imagery.
Keep writing it out.
~Scorp |
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