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No Trespassing
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
on
Monday, 10th November 2014 @ 11:44:26 AM in AEST
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Lurking. With the curiosity of a cat
Jerking. Your...Chained, furiosoty of my bat
To ball-
My words, (your gall!)
Don't trip, or fall,
Slither. In slinks of emotive veils of deceit
Gibber. Jabber, but make sure you keep the receipt
Tolled hefty price!
Spawned men, of mice,
Weakened. Your desire to ignite my words unborn
Cheapened. Lacking in guidance, hopeless, and forlorn
Drowning, in seas-
Of your envy.
Exposing. At once plastic hearts, full of nitrate
Composing. A moment of your day, to fellate
Egos, duelling-
Gases fuelling
Spewing. Subduing, venom, at alarming rates
Brewing. Construing, something similar to hate.
Copyright ©
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2014-11-10 11:44:26]
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Re: No Trespassing
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by Beyfoxman5 on
Monday, 10th November 2014 @ 02:57:16 PM AEST
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| This write smacks me around. You have a special talent. |
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Re: No Trespassing
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by Jigget on
Tuesday, 11th November 2014 @ 02:06:55 AM AEST
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| well done! i haven't been on here for awhile, and yours is the first poem i've read in months...(other than my own). i like the adherence to theme and structure. also your rhyme pattern and discipline. well-written. |
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Re: No Trespassing
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 11th November 2014 @ 01:48:10 PM AEST
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Thank goodness you're apparently not afraid of snakes. They keep appearing in your phenomenal poems!!!!
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Re: No Trespassing
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 11th November 2014 @ 02:27:13 PM AEST
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beautiful style and flow, sounds to me like you
put someone in their place, i'm likely way off lol,
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: No Trespassing
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Thursday, 13th November 2014 @ 11:21:08 PM AEST
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| Again from start to finish a well thought out and polished poem, and always your closing lines are soo soo good. Your expertise with words puts most to shame my dear Scorp |
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