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Lost In The Poppy Fields
Contributed by
puppy_dog_eyes
on
Saturday, 8th November 2014 @ 05:29:52 AM in AEST
Topic:
war
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Captain said we were ready, brave souls on the precipice of history
Eyes set firm on the earth rim of no man's land ready for beyond
Silent all with thumping, fearful heart, pawns in a game designed by madmen
Each of us whispering prayers that this day would not end without us
Our duty confined us here, in rat infested tunnels, bloodwashed and sangbagged
This death ridden hole where the smoke of war clouds out the brightest stars
And the boom of distant gun tears out any tranquil thoughts and peaceful dreams
Leaving only mudspattered remains of broken men, to be set upon by vengeant bullets
We started over, up the ladder into bright condemning morning sunshine
Friends, husbands, brothers, walked forward scanning for the mist ghosts
The collective objective to drive out the enemy from every dug out alleyway
Yet the singular desire not to fall to the shrill shriek of a snipers round
Rifles at the slope, across the chest and pointing to the radiant sky
We moved en masse, with instilled arrogance to the unseen enemy
Bayonets glistening we took the main stage, 5 yards apart to a man as commanded
A line of lambs, a team of lions, whichever history would decide
One by one we fell, some with luck and the kindness of a swift death
While others screamed the agony of bleeding savaged limbs
Slaughter weaving through the smoke, scything from the ranks, vehement as the storm
Mocking our advance, swept aside like Autumn leaves on cold October morn.
Those of us returned tell of hell among the mudpools and comrades bathed in blood
Respect must go to the devil, the fools he made across both sides of a battleground
Under darkened skies last breath was given, valour scribed in journals to gather dust
Graves that bear no name, friends together still, lost in the poppy fields.
Copyright ©
puppy_dog_eyes
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2014-11-08 05:29:52]
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Re: Lost In The Poppy Fields
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by Beyfoxman5 on
Saturday, 8th November 2014 @ 06:28:26 AM AEST
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Every line is so rich, I had to read it again. This poem humbles me, inspires me, touches me. We can't forget. Thank you for sharing.
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Re: Lost In The Poppy Fields
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 8th November 2014 @ 01:18:38 PM AEST
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Steve, this is outstanding. Your finest moment yet. Like a firsthand account of Hell. Imagery so boldly stated that I had to avert my eyes, and offer a moment of silence. Bravo.
Lest we forget.
~Scorp |
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Re: Lost In The Poppy Fields
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Sunday, 9th November 2014 @ 12:57:31 AM AEST
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masterful writing. You did a great job telling this story. I felt like I was there. I served from 2006-2013 in the Army so this was hard to read in some places. I felt my stomach drop a few times
Leaving only mudspattered remains of broken men, to be set upon by vengeant bullets.
A great line |
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Re: Lost In The Poppy Fields
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 10th November 2014 @ 09:55:29 AM AEST
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raw, vivid and penned in griping reality, war is hell, to all forever....
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Lost In The Poppy Fields
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 14th November 2014 @ 07:46:43 PM AEST
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| I often mention empathy as being the art of poetry. You empathise this so well. A fantastic tribute, and so very, very well written. |
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Re: Lost In The Poppy Fields
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by thistle_and_fern on
Sunday, 7th December 2014 @ 12:28:05 AM AEST
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Beautifully written as usual Steve.
Totally got lost in this one and could visualise those men
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Re: Lost In The Poppy Fields
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by irisblue on
Thursday, 9th April 2015 @ 10:09:40 PM AEST
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steve,
every line is a masterpiece. I'm just in awe of your writing!
God bless,
k |
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Re: Lost In The Poppy Fields
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by JamesStockdale on
Sunday, 10th February 2019 @ 05:34:49 AM AEST
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| Just wonderful and then some!!! |
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