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Chains of Air
Contributed by
Invierno
on
Saturday, 1st November 2014 @ 07:55:36 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Such a crowded room my minds/'/ become,
alone, yet filled with everyone.
These chains of air, were they steel
would afford me greater hope
than my hands and feet tethered
with the silliness of rope-
I should be so unconcerned.
When tendrils of actions and mossy memories
clamber and struggle to choke out the now,
my arm can/'/t heft the machete required
to strike the heart and plough them back.
The old house on the lonely road
given over to nature/'/s indifference-
this is the state I find myself,
windows gaping glassless,
wood soft to a thousand rains
and shady creepy ivy that inch by inch
makes gains.
Copyright ©
Invierno
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2014-11-01 07:55:36]
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Re: Chains of Air
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by RussellReinhardt on
Saturday, 1st November 2014 @ 09:25:12 AM AEST
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Hey there
Not sure if I read this right. Scary place to be my friend. God bless
Greetings
Gert |
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Re: Chains of Air
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by softerware on
Saturday, 1st November 2014 @ 11:41:06 AM AEST
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The imagery is amazing..where to start? "tendrils of actions" "mossy memories" "nature's' indifference" "wood soft to a thousand rains"…
the crowded room of your mind is a garden jungle of wonderful colors and textures! Thank you for taking us on your journey..without ever moving, I have experienced hours of thoughts by your invitation!
softerware
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Re: Chains of Air
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Saturday, 1st November 2014 @ 08:05:00 PM AEST
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Oh my, this is a little bit of a masterpiece. Very well written and thought through.
windows gaping glasses.
I sat back stunned at this line. very very good. |
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Re: Chains of Air
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Saturday, 1st November 2014 @ 11:56:19 PM AEST
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*Glassless
just swung by to read it again. so much great imagery |
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Re: Chains of Air
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by hauntedscorp on
Sunday, 2nd November 2014 @ 11:27:42 AM AEST
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Wow Mike, you are tapping into some greatness lately. Such powerful opening lines- those first two. Your use of imagery to provoke your words is hard to miss. Stunning. I will be back to re-read, as this deserves much attention.
Excellent job.
~Scorp |
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Re: Chains of Air
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 4th November 2014 @ 08:39:43 AM AEST
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i find this tangibly charming, and all the plant life around you!
every line is perfection one not over-shadowing the other but
enhancing the whole, so beautiful,
hugs n' love nessa |
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