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Sterile
Contributed by
Archie
on
Wednesday, 29th October 2014 @ 09:39:05 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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This poem actually comes from a good and sober place. It is the lessons I have learned this year from my trials. I hint at a few of them in my song lyric. This is the differance between what doctors say and reality. It is on the eve of the next step in the new start I have this year.
The storms of life rage though we pray for calmness
It never comes except from that place with in
Fifty days in the hospital taught me
what happens when we lose our way
This is when you know who your true friends are
as the fog closes in on all sides
They're the ones who keep on yelling for you
The ones who want you to survive
So white are the wall in here
They're sterile
Unreal are the rules in here
They are a bunch of lies
So white are the walls in here
like marrow
No blood or consciousness
to open up my eyes
Here I am again walking down the same road
will i make the same choice again
Given what I've learned, can I say tomorrow
that i am a different man
The same storms will rage again
from the ages of yesterday
the same substance from my inner self
that drives me so insane
So white are the wall in here
They're sterile
Unreal are the rules in here
They are a bunch of lies
So white are the walls in here
like marrow
No blood or consciousness
to open up my eyes
'Everything will be alright'
The doctors say
You can overcome most anything
if you know the game
But the truth is to face our problems
and know they'll never go away
And maybe we'll be a little stronger
when the storm comes another day
So white are the wall in here
They're sterile
Unreal are the rules in here
They are a bunch of lies
So white are the walls in here
like marrow
No blood or consciousness
to open up my eyes
Copyright ©
Archie
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2014-10-29 09:39:05]
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Re: Sterile
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by Waynster on
Wednesday, 29th October 2014 @ 05:42:34 PM AEST
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| I like it very much, very different, almost like a song. Keep on writing! |
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Re: Sterile
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by hauntedscorp on
Thursday, 30th October 2014 @ 12:37:59 PM AEST
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The tone is stark, sterile, as the title suggests. I like the way you shaped this poem. The repeating lines almost song-like, but so morose. It became a death march of despair. In other words, I think this is excellent.
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Re: Sterile
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 31st October 2014 @ 05:55:27 PM AEST
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don't know what it was... but this scared me, perhaps the
stark reality of nothingness:: those walls i found haunting...
so beautifully penned, so tangibly real,
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Sterile
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Monday, 1st December 2014 @ 03:52:36 AM AEST
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| Calmness, that seems like a mythical land. A great thought provoking write from start to finish. Always that aha moment that makes us open our a little bit and raise our heads up to notice something we have never seen before. Cannot believe I haven't read more from you Archie, I remember you from my very young days on here, that was almost a decade ago |
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