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Dream a Better Dream
Contributed by
voice of the silent
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Sunday, 19th October 2014 @ 03:52:38 PM in AEST
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Might come back and redo this one not sure, but hope you all enjoy -Voice
In all that we seem
we are all but a dream
inside a dream
A fleeting thought in the head
Of someone nodding off to bed
Time has no meaning it seems
Because we are all just a dream
Only in a sick twisted mind
Could this reality be mine
I wish for a better day
I wish we could do it a better way
And as it would seem
All we would have to do
Is dream a better dream
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Re: Dream a Better Dream
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by softerware on
Sunday, 19th October 2014 @ 09:32:45 PM AEST
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How well you have said it: Life is what we perceive it to be! A splendid conclusion closes the door.."All we would have to do is dream a better dream"!
This hardly needs a re-write; I enjoyed it just as you wrote it!
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Re: Dream a Better Dream
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 20th October 2014 @ 12:03:58 AM AEST
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enjoyable and enlightening,
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Dream a Better Dream
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by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 20th October 2014 @ 09:19:12 AM AEST
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Everything seems to be in place to me, no need to tweak it.
I enjoyed your thought process here and the format you chose to express your words. Great ending, has some sting.
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