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Fluttering Leaves
Contributed by
shelby
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Wednesday, 15th October 2014 @ 05:29:25 PM in AEST
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Fluttering leaves
October 15, 2014 at 3:26pm
Fall is breathing in the air
a frosty sullen breath.
The rain it patters on the glass
the wind tosses golden leaves about.
They flutter lightly in the breeze
and bitter-sweet the memories.
Float back to my thoughts once more
as the clouds begin to darken,
like the feeling in my heart.
Another leaf of orange gold
tumbles to the ground.
A season changing once more
I think about my dad.
He loved all the seasons.
Was hard to tell which he liked best.
He loved the fall beginning
and hunting trips in the woods.
The smell of bacon frying in a pan
upon a pile of campfire wood.
I almost can hear his voice today
and hunting stories he had to tell
floating on the frosty air.
A raindrop mixes with a tear or two
I hope a hunting trip for you dad
is on the books for you in Heaven.
sighhhhhh
(c) Michelle C Hamlin
10-15-2014
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shelby
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2014-10-15 17:29:25]
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Re: Fluttering Leaves
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by Invierno on
Wednesday, 15th October 2014 @ 05:42:04 PM AEST
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A very nice tribute. I love autumn myself. My b-dayis the 20th of Oct.
this reminds me of a fall poem I wrote eons ago. All I remember is the first stanza:
"Leaves are drifting softly,
floating on the wind,
with a flutter and sigh
The Mother takes them in"
I wish I could remember more.
Well done on your poem. Good elements and well constructed. I like that you did not employ rhyme when it would have fit. It gives this substance.
Invierno
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Re: Fluttering Leaves
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by softerware on
Wednesday, 15th October 2014 @ 09:33:08 PM AEST
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Lovely nostalgic read. We all have someone we hold to our hearts and you have put us all in touch with our person and their memories. Your vivid recall speaks volumes of your connection to him still.
How fortunate for each of you! How fortunate for us!
softerware
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Re: Fluttering Leaves
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by Ambivalence on
Saturday, 18th October 2014 @ 01:19:52 PM AEST
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I like how you captured the fall season and
more importantly the way your father poignantly
moves you. I'm sure he'd really appreciate this sincere tribute.
Take care
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Re: Fluttering Leaves
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 19th October 2014 @ 07:56:49 PM AEST
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such vivid images, beautifully penned my friend,
big hugs, woofies n' love nessa |
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Re: Fluttering Leaves
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by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 20th October 2014 @ 12:29:39 PM AEST
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A bittersweet yet beautiful tribute, Michelle.
Fall is breathing in the air
a frosty sullen breath.
Excellent job setting the tone.
Big hugs.
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