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Full Circle
Contributed by
softerware
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Saturday, 4th October 2014 @ 01:45:04 PM in AEST
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At first we were young lovers who only had to share;
Our bodies and our worldy goods, our hopes and our Corvair.
Magically our twoness blossomed into four;
Sleepless nights and tiny lives wondering what’s in store.
Sprinkle in a mortgage, and add a station wagon;
Scouting; braces, school plays and a costume for a dragon!
Charge accounts; and pillow fights; a gerbil and two dogs;
PTA and ballet lessons; neighbors and in-laws!
From a simple bonding born of admiration;
We became as complex as a world class corporation!
Life insurance; profit margins; school tuition plans;
Driving lessons; graduation; both have wedding plans!
I wondered walking down the aisle to give them to another;
Why my wife was crying, like every new bride’s mother;
Does she cry for knowing what our daughter’s headed to?
Or are her tears because she knows
it's just, once more, we two?
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Re: Full Circle
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 4th October 2014 @ 02:05:54 PM AEST
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Aha! Nicely done.
From a simple bonding born of admiration;
We became as complex as a world class corporation!
That pretty much sums it up :)
I think what I admire most about this "humourous" piece, is the way you ended it. The ending reveals to me, that there is a real concern here, buried in humour. Great job.
~Scorp |
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Re: Full Circle
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by RussellReinhardt on
Saturday, 4th October 2014 @ 04:02:46 PM AEST
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Dearest Soft
What a beautiful write. All the emotions just like life WoW. I enjoyed this one very much. God bless
Greetings
Rus |
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Re: Full Circle
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 4th October 2014 @ 04:03:14 PM AEST
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beautifully penned, good on you for doing the male perspective,
very clever, ::the ending a new start, sad a bit i 'spose....
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Full Circle
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 5th October 2014 @ 02:39:07 AM AEST
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I close my eyes a lot and wonder such things too
I close my eyes and my ears sometimes too
And I dream and go back and walk
Along that path where we were first time we kissed
And I hold your hand
And worry about finance
And I close my mind
Because it is sometimes I
Who forgot the promise I
made
No matter what I said
richer or poorer
Like a damn fool
But I was only being true'
You see it isn't fate
that made you or me
Great poem
software you got it going on
full stop
the circle shrink
is something we miss
I think when we know
that isn't what we
are supposed to know
Peace!
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Re: Full Circle
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by elle on
Sunday, 5th October 2014 @ 10:28:59 PM AEST
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Hi :)
I really enjoyed your poem. I love the flow & the ending, as well.
elle |
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Re: Full Circle
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by Invierno on
Tuesday, 7th October 2014 @ 06:04:26 AM AEST
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Thanks for the smile. You are an artist.
Invierno |
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Re: Full Circle
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 26th January 2015 @ 08:57:09 PM AEST
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Now see, I read this. I again got side tracked. I have several excuses why I missed commenting on it.
*scans excuse book*
Ah, yes, there it is! The phone rang!!! ;-)
I honestly don't remember but I remember the warm fuzzies this brought. So, so touching. Love the way you can sum up a life time into a short little package. Wonderful! You brought smiles, humor, and even a little lump in the ol' throat.
Thank you,
Sir Timotheus
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Re: Full Circle
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by Pogivic on
Saturday, 14th March 2015 @ 10:14:30 PM AEST
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| Yes, This is a good picture of life and how it progresses. I guess different people cry at weddings for different reasons. I never cried when I got married I was too scared. |
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