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Metaphor Man
Contributed by
JohnRhinem
on
Monday, 11th August 2014 @ 03:19:07 PM in AEST
Topic:
political
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Running to the beat upon a concrete street
Time through a paper made city; unto
Your castle's red rhyme door....
Built atop the sand about a silky shore!?
Digital dreams aside a diagram's plan
With fateful stars and their blue tide cars
Lavender sunsets while the waves roll by
Amid a hoola hoop sister in a thing called sins
Giggle she'll wiggle as a little bit more; ten four
Man's, bronze made flesh from a cream made whore....
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....“Metaphor Man?!”
Copyright ©
JohnRhinem
... [
2014-08-11 15:19:07]
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Re: Metaphor Man
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by alicewhite on
Monday, 11th August 2014 @ 03:55:19 PM AEST
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Absolutely brilliant !, I love it, very creative writing , Im struggling to pick a favourite line because each line is as good as the next , so i choose them all x beautifully crafted poem x
thankyou for your comment on my poem, and thanks for calling me baby girl, I liked that , made me smile x |
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Re: Metaphor Man
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by spud on
Tuesday, 12th August 2014 @ 07:58:31 AM AEST
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Hi,
Some brilliant lines here, and am assuming you're
taking a pop at wordly politics inability to be
inventive and innovative(?)
Spud
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Re: Metaphor Man
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by JohnRhinem on
Tuesday, 12th August 2014 @ 12:57:52 PM AEST
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| Yes, Spud, i would say so in part ? More thou in regards unto 'many of they: the 'Evil,' that courses through their pathetic, blind and incompetent hypocritic poisoned as pangful ranks both, bought as sold!.... |
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Re: Metaphor Man
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by Invierno on
Wednesday, 13th August 2014 @ 06:19:10 PM AEST
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very cool! 'blue tide cars'...wow, man. Very cool!
Nice employment of word sound incorporation into the write.
Better every time I read it.
Invierno |
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Re: Metaphor Man
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 17th August 2014 @ 12:15:53 AM AEST
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Dear John,
what is a metaphor?
But she was, only a metaphor
like my heart
Lavender sunsets, CGI
blue
glue under way past
predicting naked
skin
boobs
face
lips
tongue
Suit of armor
Sancho Panza,
oh me, oh my
what's the use...
Simile
Peace!
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Re: Metaphor Man
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 17th August 2014 @ 12:20:48 AM AEST
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John,
Man you penned it with,
"mans, bronze made flesh from a cream made whore... btw.
very good indeed!
Peace! |
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