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Laughing Hyena
Contributed by
UNKNOWN_UTOPIA
on
Wednesday, 30th July 2014 @ 12:20:41 AM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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I rush to go lock my door
as I hear footsteps in the hall,
on the edge and paranoid
I need
but don't want anyone around.
I'm getting a strange feeling
that the end is coming
in slow motion.
The news shows scenes of violence
and my neighbors music is to loud,
I only have one friend
he just text'd me
and he don't like me now.
I never seem to really know
what is happening
so I
just pretend...
my face starts to crack
as I realize there's no way out.
I continue to exist
in the outer limits
of a world that is so depressive,
talking heads will spin their false tales
and crippled pilgrims keep falling down.
minions of madness
applaud
as miss misery kisses me
again and again,
confusion reigns as Illusions flow
as I laugh
all I can do is frown.
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UNKNOWN_UTOPIA
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Re: Laughing Hyena
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 30th July 2014 @ 12:50:05 AM AEST (User
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It's like reading the first chapter of a story with several subplots where we'll discover later where they go. Very vivid imagery and somewhat ambiguous to me.
Thank you for an enjoyable read.
Tim |
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Re: Laughing Hyena
(User Rating: 1 ) by gmcse8 on
Wednesday, 30th July 2014 @ 08:09:14 AM AEST (User
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I trust this is a temporary state. Some nice imagery. I especially liked the crippled pilgrims line. I think it must be unique; I have never seen it before. |
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Re: Laughing Hyena
(User Rating: 1 ) by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 30th July 2014 @ 08:44:24 AM AEST (User
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it's almost like you had a fever when writing this because of the
surprize thoughts along the way- the lines that just come up and
zap the reader with vivid amazement, and clever poetic brilliance,
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Laughing Hyena
(User Rating: 1 ) by alicewhite on
Sunday, 10th August 2014 @ 05:46:08 PM AEST (User
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I only have one friend
he just text'd me
and he don't like me now.
I never seem to really know
what is happening
so I
just pretend...
talking heads will SPIN their false tales
and crippled pilgrims keep falling down.
minions of madness
applaud
as miss misery kisses me
again and again,
confusion reigns as Illusions flow
as I laugh
all I can do is frown.
I feel like you could be writing about my life on my behalf with this poem,
as if by magic art imitating life and life in turn imitates art in a kaleidoscope hologram, beautiful and intimately perceptive ,
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Re: Laughing Hyena
(User Rating: 1 ) by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 17th November 2014 @ 07:47:43 PM AEST (User
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This is deep...Your voice is strong here, and it feels like I just sat down and had a chat with you. Wonderful.
~Scorp
(One of your many friends here) |
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