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Fresh Start
Contributed by
Theuri
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Wednesday, 9th July 2014 @ 11:33:38 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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His mind, well worn from the many years of abuse he’d put it through, would still have to face another challenge as he took pen in hand and walked to the wall. White paint sat shining with a yellowed tint from the old light he’d pulled to the center of the room, glistening like pathetic jokes of what a child might think to be “gold” hiding in the paint on the wall, it would quickly be a dream buried as he went to work. Drawing on paint was never an easy task, when working with a pen, it was made even harder by the fact that he was telling a story. Writing out the words with great precision, he had to keep the spacing perfect, since the tale he was telling would not only speak his feelings, but would also become a sketched image on the wall. It took him years of drafting and re-drafting to finally figure out how to get the letters and words in the right places, but the picture of his life that he’d wanted to share with her, would finally be made complete. Three days went by, that’s all the time he had, and just enough. He turned off the light and slid it into the corner of the room as he heard the door downstairs close with a thunk. Nimble as always he’d slip out of the window, leaving his pen on the seal. Fading completely into the blackness of a world long forgotten by the time she walked into her room, he didn’t watch as she read the tale of a shadow's love, for as dawn drifted over the horizon, he’d fade into oblivion… finally free, always hoping he’d be able to leave that girl, who’d housed a shadow in her heart.
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2014-07-09 23:33:38]
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Re: Fresh Start
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 10th July 2014 @ 01:13:47 AM AEST
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I didn't quite get this bit: leaving his pen on the seal But I guess you meant window sill? Overall, though, a very interesting write. It kept me wondering about him...and her, and who they were. It held my interest and that's the way it's done!!! :)
Nicely done.
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Re: Fresh Start
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by DarkWolf on
Saturday, 12th July 2014 @ 02:51:37 AM AEST
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| Nice write. Liked the story it told. Work on your flow though and how it is layed out. Doing this will make it a nicer and easier read. |
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Re: Fresh Start
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 13th July 2014 @ 08:57:38 PM AEST
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absolutely beautiful!
hugs n' love nessa |
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