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trying to light ashes
Contributed by
ladyfawn
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Saturday, 17th May 2014 @ 08:03:03 PM in AEST
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♥
it seems the wick is frayed
the flame just will not start
in palm of hand are laid
black purest works of art,
flame flaring insufficiency
spiritless lack of desire
inflammable thermicity
fuliginous apathetic fire!
no pale yellow primrose
sooty soot from the stars
sidereals of prehistoric haze
coloured as primordial tar.
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Re: trying to light ashes
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 17th May 2014 @ 10:21:38 PM AEST
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pure poetry...
it lights my ash.
In the backroom where I
left it smoldering.
It was a guitar.
Thank you for this
wonderful ooze.
absolute 100 proof unlabled art.
Peace! |
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Re: trying to light ashes
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 17th May 2014 @ 10:35:31 PM AEST
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An ash can only be washed away and then it starts anew. Very interesting and a tad complex for my poor brain cells.
Very artful, though. Me likes.
Tim |
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Re: trying to light ashes
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by Tiny_Tina on
Saturday, 17th May 2014 @ 10:35:39 PM AEST
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| it is abstract but nice to read |
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Re: trying to light ashes
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by shelby on
Sunday, 18th May 2014 @ 01:38:22 AM AEST
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| Beautiful |
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Re: trying to light ashes
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by softerware on
Sunday, 18th May 2014 @ 01:53:47 AM AEST
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some burn bright, some flicker, some glow, ..our lights as different as we…woe to the would be flame with "spiritless lack of desire"! One day they will say over us...."ashes to ashes..dust to dust',
Perhaps we should burn while we may! Cast a blinding light..or fade to "primordial tar!"
An entertaining forewarning, Ladyfawn!
Nicely crafted!
softerware |
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Re: trying to light ashes
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by Invierno on
Sunday, 18th May 2014 @ 10:47:37 AM AEST
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Darker than your average sharing, but I hasten to add I like it quite a bit.
I hope whatever has occurred that would lend your mind to bend your hand to play it out and understand, has been (by this effort) laid to rest and put to bed; your angst expelled took flight and fled.
Best,
Invierno |
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Re: trying to light ashes
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 20th May 2014 @ 01:31:38 PM AEST
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Oh Nessa, I love this piece... And I know this feeling so well. Heart wrenching to watch someone's light flicker out- our own, or a loved ones. Take care of you.
Beautifully abstract. Well done.
~Scorp |
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Re: trying to light ashes
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by Archie on
Thursday, 22nd May 2014 @ 03:59:14 PM AEST
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| This is really good and quite beyond me. I think the ash is the left over stuff from when inspiration dies and we are left abandoned by it. I just hope that a few embers remain to spark creativity into flame once more and certainly this poem shows that your flame has not burned out. |
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Re: trying to light ashes
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by reprobate on
Sunday, 25th May 2014 @ 10:27:35 PM AEST
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Well. This was inspired. Pure poetry!
Hopefully, your muse has pointed you to a more cheerful spot.
I had to snicker, though. I wondered how many readers scrambled for a dictionary? :-D;-) I had wrote once about a fulvous flame and the pm's came pouring in. Ah, sweet myteries of life!
Excellent. Simply excellent.
Thank you for sharing...
Moving portion finished,
Michael |
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Re: trying to light ashes
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 26th May 2014 @ 04:24:43 AM AEST
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| Wow! So beautifully written, and I love both the images and ideas it conveys... The quote you added to it just makes it perfect :) |
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Re: trying to light ashes
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by colinb on
Thursday, 3rd July 2014 @ 02:38:44 AM AEST
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| really enjoyed this poem excellent |
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