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Labyrinth
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Saturday, 1st February 2014 @ 09:01:17 PM in AEST
Topic:
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You're out of breath from a brief foot chase
One and done in this amazing race
Always on the hunt for something bigger
With a gun in hand, pull back the trigger
Exposing wounds to irrigate
A tongue in cheek to lacerate
With teeth exposed to amputate
Don't poke the bear or agitate
Less than zero survival rate
Words evaporate without a trace
Pleading ignorance you stacked your case
This show is over, but here's the kicker-
You produced a cough, but I am sicker.
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hauntedscorp
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2014-02-01 21:01:17]
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Re: Labyrinth
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 2nd February 2014 @ 12:15:38 AM AEST
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Was it BBQ'd? :p
I would never poke or agitate a bear unless it was a stuffed bear.
There is either vagueness or I am clueless to this poem's meaning but this Labyrinth was quite a trip through scary hood.
Funky
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Re: Labyrinth
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 2nd February 2014 @ 12:18:58 AM AEST
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I thought this was a good friend of mine writing, the title, Labyrinth, was an ungodly name of a rock band we created. But alas, I was clearly wrong, and I sneezed, there was no tissue, and my computer screen is way too large, so instead into my elbow as is proper it went, so as not to infect any unknowing healthy soul as it were.
"I am sicker", is abrupt and aptly rapped in
mystery, and I liked it.
A corrupt GI tract, or the more broadly diagnosis of upper respiratory infection, as in, this is infectious writing.
Well done. Now go get some medicine. We recently went to this new more collaborative open style desk office space with no walls, I had to get a doctors note to get the extra, ultra-expensive adjustable raised desk, because I hate to sit all damn day, so while I was at it I asked for a prescription to medicinal marijuana - I mean, what the heck... I LOL, or LMOA with this one.
Thanks!
Peace!
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Re: Labyrinth
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 10th May 2014 @ 01:11:10 PM AEST
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slam poetry is amazing! i can see you reading
this, each line breathes and is sooo captivating,
brilliant!
hugs n' love nessa |
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