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Inner Voice
Contributed by
SevasTra
on
Saturday, 16th November 2013 @ 11:23:32 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Look at yourself
You've become torn and frayed
You've become so hostile
Pushing everyone away
Your heart has calloused over
Every piece of you has been destroyed by scars
Now you look back
You realize it didn't get you far
Your family has abandoned you
And you don't trust your friends
This world has abused you
Misunderstood and used you
Please don't give in.
.........
I tried life, I tried love
It's all lies, I give up
Just a big mistake
A disgrace
I don't care I don't care
Just shut up
I don't need to hear you
I can hear you
My mind is laughing at me
You tried twice
And it didn't work
You wont die, I'll make sure
Don't give up, hold on please
Listen To Me
You were made to survive
You were built to fight
Don't give in
You will win
Just listen.
Copyright ©
SevasTra
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2013-11-16 11:23:32]
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Re: Inner Voice
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 17th November 2013 @ 09:05:30 AM AEST
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I like the way some of it seems to be written in the third person. Or is it two people talking? :)
Nicely done.
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Re: Inner Voice
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by lostrelic on
Sunday, 17th November 2013 @ 12:54:10 PM AEST
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Good post I enjoyed the flow and conversation that it gives images to.
Thank you for posting
Regan W |
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Re: Inner Voice
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by alicewhite on
Sunday, 17th November 2013 @ 05:47:39 PM AEST
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| great poem, really good and really interesting, I look forward to reading more from you, take care x |
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Re: Inner Voice
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by 143 on
Sunday, 24th November 2013 @ 10:16:56 PM AEST
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| VERY VERY GOOD~ |
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